Real World

This poem came to me after I woke up. Please leave your honest thoughts, Thank you! :)

What do you do

When you realize

That everything will be gone so soon 

When you can visionize 

The merciless deaths under the blue moon

They are coming

They say to me

It is happening

Why can't you see?

It is all coming to a gruesome  end

In which all your worst nightmares take a form of life

This is all a consequence for our most dreadful sins

All you see is that the blood has dried

The bodies have decayed as the maggots eat away at the flesh

Soldiers dying at wars

Kids dying of overdose

People dying of hunger

Why this is happening, is anything but a wonder

They are coming for us

The darkness slowly engulfing the world

It seems as if everyone's soul has gone cold

The flames of hell burning in their eyes

The kind that makes you wonder, not when, but how you are going to die

Their actions becoming demonic 

Their minds brainwashed, turning them psychotic.

Author's Note

Please leave your honest thoughts, I could really use the advice :)

Reviews

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I like the way the poem's theme is divided into stanzas: (from my viewpoint) in the first one, it's about the revelation of the world's/life's end and one's own understanding of it; in the second one, it's about the reasons why it is happening; and the third one transports us right in the middle of it, with all three stanzas beautifully depicted! It's a pretty deep poem, I like it!

[Simmirose]

Thanks so much :)

[Beautiful_Nightmere]

Holy crap!!!!!! This is amazing!!!! :)

[Simmirose]

Thanks Bri!

[Elleira]

Goodness...

[Simmirose]

What the Freakin Beans?!?1 jajaja

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

This is so raw and just...perfect, really. It just radiates the question, "Why?" Making the world look back at itself and at the same time, forcing it to look into it's own future. Amazing poem, keep up the good work!

[Simmirose]

Thank you! :)

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

My pleasure :)

[Rose of Gondor]

It's a very deep poem, that's for sure. It's also kind of creepy (did you HAVE to put the maggot part in there?), but it's a lovely poem, I think. There are some parts where your rythm needs work, but over all, this is great! :D

[Simmirose]

thanks so much for your review! and about the maggot part, I originally wrote it without that part, but you're not that first.person to find it creepy but thank.you so much. I deeply appreciate it :)

[Rose of Gondor]

:D Thank YOU for putting a wonderful poem out!