Yes, this is nice. I love the sentiments. The experimental form made me stutter as I read, but there was something mysteriously mechanical about the stutters. As I read I felt as if I were being spoken to by a robot; and coming from a robot, I shouldn't feel any emotional connection to an inanimate object, but It seems/read to me as though the robot was an infant!! (God I hope I haven't gotten anyone pregnant) Maybe its my present emotional state that permits me to allow your experimental(robotic) form to convey these empathic feelings. I took the tone of your piece to be as a lament, but in robotic form. I can't quite put my finger on why I like this, but I like it...in a weird kind of way. Weird is always good in my book. Opens up unexplored avenues of understanding. Nice.
I read the uniquely placed spacing as pauses in a halting conversation. Not wanting to be so honest. Admitting to the lack of . . . We rarely want to admit that. I really enjoyed this. Made me think today.
Forethought then Hollowness...this tittle is very well suited for this piece. Makes me think of the somewhat infantile Tin-Man from The Wizard Of Oz. All the Tin-Man(robot by 21st century standards) wanted in his hollow chest was a living, beating heart. In Essence he wanted to human. Although I do not believe that love is restricted to only the Human species. Maybe our PC's are capable of a profound love that we cannot understand. Think about it. Our computers are very social entities. According to sociologist, socializing is a prime indicator of a human's capacity to love and understand love, but I'm getting off the point...somewhat. Again, a very interesting piece.
Yes, this is nice. I love the sentiments. The experimental form made me stutter as I read, but there was something mysteriously mechanical about the stutters. As I read I felt as if I were being spoken to by a robot; and coming from a robot, I shouldn't feel any emotional connection to an inanimate object, but It seems/read to me as though the robot was an infant!! (God I hope I haven't gotten anyone pregnant) Maybe its my present emotional state that permits me to allow your experimental(robotic) form to convey these empathic feelings. I took the tone of your piece to be as a lament, but in robotic form. I can't quite put my finger on why I like this, but I like it...in a weird kind of way. Weird is always good in my book. Opens up unexplored avenues of understanding. Nice.