Baring the Timid Heart

Baring the Timid Heart

A Poem by Elina
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I tried something a little different; each line has five syllables. I'm not entirely sure why I decided on five, but it ended up working perfectly for the last line. (In memory of Tony; 17 June, 2014)

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It is quiet here;
You lie motionless.
I have come to give
My final farewell.
My heart is pounding;
I long to caress
Your face and curl up
Beside your still form.
Instead, I lean down
And whisper to you.
My heart cries fiercely,
"It is me, belov'd."
In comparison,
The words poured from my
Lips seem woefully
Inadequate; cheap.
As I gaze upon you,
Studying ev'ry
Infinite detail,
I finally gain
Courage to tell you
What my heart has felt.
Again, I lean down;
Drawing ever near.
I move, unhurried,
Until my face rests
Inches from your own.
With one more deep breath,
I close the small gap.
My lips touch your cheek;
Gently and with all
Form of tenderness.
You do not respond.
Yet I feel, somehow,
That you are aware.
After such time of
Tortuous ages,
I am finally
Able to bare my
Timid heart to you.
I tell you, for both
The first and last time,
"I love you so much."

© 2014 Elina


Author's Note

Elina
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I love the gentle tenderness of your lovely art choice, Elina,
It sets the perfect moment and ambiance for what's to come.

Your metered Free Verse (a rare technique) works out beautifully in creating a smooth, even flow, seamlessly blending one line into the next. Your emotional imagery captured my heart and soul, as does the poignant sadness that grabbed the most sensitive parts of my feelings.

There is so much in this that speaks to me, and I want you to know the last seven lines brimmed my eyes to overflowing … how unjust to think a love so deeply felt and pure went unknown for so long, 'til it was too late; but, I think Tony had to have known.

Whomever said there is no beauty in sadness, never read this wonderfully rendered piece from your skillful pen and loving heart.
Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 4 Years Ago


Elina

4 Years Ago

Richard,
I must thank you for your lovely and thorough review. It warms my heart to know that.. read more
Richard🖌

4 Years Ago

Elina,
You are most welcome for my thorough review; it is my contention a writer deserves (wh.. read more
Dealing with goodbye... is a rite of passage in our "becoming" whom we are.

Posted 6 Years Ago


It drawing an image into mind and realized the fact.
Oh gosh! touching peace beloved poet.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elina

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
Hmmm, so from a death a timid heart starts to blossom. From winter there is spring. That's kinda the feel i picked up. Evocative and thought provoking write-- thank you for sharing your work here:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elina

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your review.
I agree with Moonskittles, this is a very touching and personal poem the reader can't help but feel sad about. Great writing Elina.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elina

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the review.
Relic

9 Years Ago

You're welcome
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Oh, a melancholic good bye, that touches the heart of the reader.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elina

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the review.
This is such a sad but beautiful poem
I did enjoyed a lot reading it and the emotion you put into it is good.
Awesome poem!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elina

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed it so well.
Lizardo

9 Years Ago

You're welcome!
Your elegy is tender and full of love for your beloved. The rhythm you used for your lines did work perfectly, especially in your last line. I am very glad you were able to share your feelings at the end. May he eternally rest in the kingdom of peace with a halo of light.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elina

9 Years Ago

Thank you, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Clockwork

9 Years Ago

You're welcome.
Very powerful. I want to know more.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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