I like your use of "shadow" in this context, leaving the reader to imagine for herself/himself what that dark figure represents. I think you could've added another line or two, and made this poem even more powerful. Still, it's a great piece of work. You so well convey fear, and leave the reader asking, "what is that shadow? Is it even something to fear? Nice work.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Really glad you got what I wanted readers to get out of it! Thanks so much!
I sense the poem to be an Afro American experience, although not exclusive. You fill the reader with a dread that something terrible might happen and in that sense I find the writing remarkable.
Regards,
Al
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Exactly the response I wanted from a reader! The point of the poem is for each reader to interpret t.. read moreExactly the response I wanted from a reader! The point of the poem is for each reader to interpret the shadow as something different and personal to themselves. So glad you liked it!
Like it has been said, this is good. I enjoyed the build up, but think the last line drained some of its oomph. Perhaps it is just the change in rhythm. Or a couple of lines describing the shadows purpose is needed. Still well done!
- George
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
The last line was more to say that every thing that is of the darkness will come, but it will leave .. read moreThe last line was more to say that every thing that is of the darkness will come, but it will leave eventually. Thanks for the review!
I think its great how you constantly raised the tension in each line, it felt eerie and yet thrilling at the same time. I guess I visualized myself in one of my favorite horror movies as I was reading this. You've got a way of taking people back into their minds which is fine. keep up the work.