The Fox, The Wolf, and The Starling Pt. 1

This is the opening to a short story I'm working on at the moment. Hopefully can get the other parts finished up and posted soon. Enjoy

 

They sat, siliently and still, on the cold park bench.

One small and slim, the other broad and bulky.

Perched on their seat, much like vultures in a tree.

The only sound that came from their way was the occasional crackling of a cigarette that they shared. Dressed in black, silhouetted in smoke, fire in their eyes.

A mission they had, a mission to accomplish. God forbid someone gets in their way.

The fox and the wolf, savage creatures they are.

Waiting for the objective, waiting to present a message.

Message for the masses, to each individual.

Obey.

Obey.

Obey.

***

 

She walked, almost with an angelic grace, humming tunelessly. Slimline caricature of the average beauty. Finding pace in a beat from here to there, music pouring through her pink headphones. Military jacket and tattered jeans, princess of a grunge democracy, hope flowing from her presense.

A starling, carefree and fearless.

Hopefull to deliver a message, to finish her objective.

Her prerogative is to stay happy, and make everyone else just as joyful.

Happiness

Love

Peace

Reviews

[roarke]

Interesting juxtaposition, immoveable object/unstoppable force kinda thing. LInger with them a little more. Don't be so brief you miss the small, subtle aspects of their characters that link to propel the story. Alternate between broad strokes and fine strokes, then let the character's tell the story.

[AngelAfterlife]

I really like this story.. its dark and simple... keep it up... I'll keep reading more :)