This was a great write it flows well and the rhyme scheme it nice. I enjoyed reading it, unlike some poems about seduction etc. this one had speed to it, it didn't drag so it made you want to read it even more. If you're into vampires you should check out my poem "Love Letter To A Vampire" but honestly I think your poem is better. Good job! Keep it up! Oh and as far as learning and getting better all it takes it practice, and reading other poetry helps as well, so write until you feel like your hand is going to fall off. I look forward to reading more of your writing. :)
This was a great write it flows well and the rhyme scheme it nice. I enjoyed reading it, unlike some poems about seduction etc. this one had speed to it, it didn't drag so it made you want to read it even more. If you're into vampires you should check out my poem "Love Letter To A Vampire" but honestly I think your poem is better. Good job! Keep it up! Oh and as far as learning and getting better all it takes it practice, and reading other poetry helps as well, so write until you feel like your hand is going to fall off. I look forward to reading more of your writing. :)
This is fantastic. Usually I'm not into the whole vampire thing,
but the seduction is this piece was excellent.
It was fast paced and quite enjoyable to read.
Can't wait to read more from you!
I REALLY liked this! To be honest, I didn't think I would because I'm not a big vampire fan but this poem was really good! I love the flow of your words and how discriptive and captivating this piece is. Great poem! :)
This is really nice, very erotic and sensual. I think you did a wonderful job capturing the desire a person who wants to be bitten can feel when they finally are experiencing what they wanted so terribly bad. Really nice job.
this is a good writing. i haven't read a poem about vampires for so long already that it's kinda refreshing, especially since i once had an obssesion with vampire novels. good job. :)
I'm new to writing. I will make many mistakes along the way. I welcome all comments. I have a passion for Vampires, Werewolves and fantasy stories. I don't write poetry often..but when I get stuck, I .. more..