Faceless

A Short Poem I wrote!!

FACELESS

 

I’m Motherless

I’m shameless

I’m Nameless

What can I call myself?

 

 Life is an open road

Life is a narrow road

Life is a bumpy road

Which one do I take?

 

He hates me

She dislikes me

They all discourage me

What can I do?

 

To get their trust

To get their love

To get their encouragement

What will I do?

 

They say I’m nothing

They say I’ll never make it

They say no one will love me

 What’s the solution?

 

I’m motherless

I’m nameless

 No one care

And most of all I’m faceless

 

                         

Author's Note

I hope you all enjoy this. Plz leave a review

Reviews

[wyrd]

You end each verse with a question except the last, not the strongest last line you could go with I think. Motherless and nameless these are qualities that others give or take, shame is a quality one has or discards for ones self so seems not quite to fit with the overall theme of your poem.
I enjoy your themes and your approach to your poetry

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Good flow and deep thoughts, this is a great poem!

[Blacke Hennessey]

I like it. It's an introspection and observation so I enjoyed it

[Lovely Soul]

deep write. I like it

[R.A. Youngblood]

It's very sad and emotional! Well done! :**

[The White Wolf]

Powerful use of words and emotions! The tone of this is so forceful yet vulnerable and I really appreciate it. It rings true of some encounters we can have with other people who feel the need to judge us out of their own insecurities. Very nicely done.

[dontwakeme]

Make your own road...sure, it'll be tough, but it's worth it. Great piece, I really enjoyed, " Life is an open road, life is a narrow road; life is a bumpy road." The flow really works.

[Just Another Writer]

I agree with the previous review on the last line thing, though I thought it was a pretty great write otherwise! Great job letting the reader connect with your emotions. Very deep. I enjoyed reading this!

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

A strong emotion of sadness ... and more precisely frustration is displayed in this in very elegant manner. I like the way you put forward the question. The ending could have been more powerful like the start and the mid way. Very nice poem :-)

[Ink Angel]

Such confusion and lack of self love, so sad. wondeful write.