Mourning Autumn

Freewriting Exercise shared for The Pagemaster's Challenge #7

Mourning autumn



there are rarely extremes
in the weather here
but that, I realize,
has resulted in the lack of brilliance

the heavy downpours are missed
by thirsty roots
and the early season chill
is sadly missing
…both sorely needed for my inspiration,
the breathtaking colors of autumn


reduced to a breath exhaled
a mere few weeks it seems…
as summer extends its hold
long after backpacks are filled
for the first time in months…

suddenly and as an afterthought
a cooler breeze comes
with a burst of color

and as a burst expands
and then contracts…
a strong gust strips away
much of autumn


just a week ago
a maple’s red leaves fell
as in a pause,
but she was full…

today, darkened remnants lie
shriveled
and blood red,
carpeting and choking the lawn

scrawling limbs, bare
outstretched, gray and cold
almost beseeching
much too soon…
it was too soon

another strong wind sends
dried leaves scampering down the black street
eerily running
and
easily giving up

where can one go
if winter
is just around the corner






 

 

 

© 2007 SilentDream (All rights reserved) 11/27/07

Author's Note

Freewriting Exercise. Time required: 10 minutes
Write without stopping until the timer goes off. Do not lift your pen from the paper, even if this means writing, 'I don't know what to write,' over and over again. Write nonsense, write anything, but don't stop writing.

Reviews

[Everett DeValle]

Beautiful Zsanece...you mastered free flowing a long time ago...I try these exercises, to challenge myself, from time to time. Lovely flow.

[SilentDream]

Were we always able to comment on reviews? =) This is new to me lol.
Thank you very much, Ev. I'm looking forward to trying these again.

[Everett DeValle]

No, it is a new feature implemented, I think late last year, but it's so cool, saves me time in sending private messages to thank each reader/reviewer...you can also interact with this feature, as well, to add as a friend or not...it's transparent...it's an awesome feature. I look forward to reading your new poetry...you are most welcome, Zsanesce. :)

[AK]

What a lovely piece of work this is...

[Samuel Dickens]

That's a very nice Autumn poem, even if it was written under such strict conditions. I always have to go back and tweak my work--often many times. I'm impressed by your skill.

[J.P. Bristow]

breathtaking is right what a wonderful piece! Thanks for participating in the challenge!