Attuned and Equally Pained

Quotes That Inspire Challenge:
Choose your favorite 2-4 lines and write a poem in response to those lines.

 

Strange Feelings

~by Sassy 

I can't quite describe them
They are buried deep inside
They consume me completely
Washing over me like the tide.

These feelings of sadness
Overwhelming and dark
Make me feel like crying
Tearing me apart.

I need to be with you
And know that I can't
I try to be patient,
But its breaking my heart.

Just want you to know this
I need for you to see,
How very much I need you
Please come home to me.

Copyright ©2008 sassy

 

 

The lines that stood out for me were:

"I need to be with you
And know that I can't"


My response:



Attuned and Equally Pained
(Tumbling Tercets)


I find that I'm torn
and, much like you,
know that one

is the other's need...
and beyond simple
want is the pull

of heartstrings, attune
and equally pained whilst
in the throes of fading



Written for Toonersworld Quotes That Inspire Challenge
Using lines from Sassy’s "Strange Feelings"



© 2008 SilentDream (All rights reserved) 10/13/08

Reviews

[AK]

Very nice, really!