A Tainted Love

How can love ever be real with people like you?

You walk, talk and scream… but most of all you trust

People, the ones you know, and sometimes those you don’t

They may make you feel safe for a while or do something you admire

Therefore you never retire, in the sense of pride… walking you’re content

Talking in your sleep, you prevent. Ever realising how you interfere

When love volunteers, and enters your life

Courageous and happy you are, but you’re not seeing the hidden truth

The broken mirror of your youth

Outrageous and silly you can allow ourselves to get, you’re unaware

That everywhere, our hearts are lying. They’re speaking and dying.

But you’re too in love to realise how you’re damaging us.

Your family who never make a fuss

We simply sit back and watch how you can forget us, silent we hush.

Author's Note

Spare of the moment write :/, improvements?
Thanks for reading.

Reviews

[Mark]

Though as another reviewer noted, it is not a sonnet, it is nevertheless a lovely thought, and well expressed, if in a style unique to itself...and what, after all is wrong with that? I was particularly taken with your technique of hiding the rhyme of each couplet within, rather than at the end of the subsequent line. If you are interested in exploring the sonnet (one of my favorite and frequentest forms), with an eye to composing one or more, I will gladly send you links to a few of mine posted here. Thanks to Dean for recommending you to me.

[Wild Willow Blue]

I love the rhythm and flow of this piece, and the subtle rhyming within the lines. I loved reading it aloud.

[quixotic_rose]

I am not skilled in the way of sonnet speakings. but I can help!
"You walk, you talk and scream… but most of all you trust" you have incorrect parallelism, "You walk, you talk, and YOU scream... but most of all you trust"
I don't know if that'll mess up the 'sonnet' rules or not, but that's what I was taught. Otherwise I don't see a need for improvement. I honestly am terrible with understanding sonnets as well, they usually have some deep meaning to them, which I'm sure yours has. Its nicely written :)