A Tainted Love

How can love ever be real with people like you?

You walk, talk and scream… but most of all you trust

People, the ones you know, and sometimes those you don’t

They may make you feel safe for a while or do something you admire

Therefore you never retire, in the sense of pride… walking you’re content

Talking in your sleep, you prevent. Ever realising how you interfere

When love volunteers, and enters your life

Courageous and happy you are, but you’re not seeing the hidden truth

The broken mirror of your youth

Outrageous and silly you can allow ourselves to get, you’re unaware

That everywhere, our hearts are lying. They’re speaking and dying.

But you’re too in love to realise how you’re damaging us.

Your family who never make a fuss

We simply sit back and watch how you can forget us, silent we hush.

Author's Note

Spare of the moment write :/, improvements?
Thanks for reading.

Reviews

[Mark]

Though as another reviewer noted, it is not a sonnet, it is nevertheless a lovely thought, and well expressed, if in a style unique to itself...and what, after all is wrong with that? I was particularly taken with your technique of hiding the rhyme of each couplet within, rather than at the end of the subsequent line. If you are interested in exploring the sonnet (one of my favorite and frequentest forms), with an eye to composing one or more, I will gladly send you links to a few of mine posted here. Thanks to Dean for recommending you to me.

[Cree Nations]

the broken mirror of your youth....
that's a good line. there is an entire story there and i think you should pursue it. Maybe not...but it's a suggestion for you to think about. let me know....

[Dr. Wood ?]

yes I love 'the broken mirror of our youth...I bet that just flowed out and you didn't even know it was there till you wrote it. You have a talent with words

[Aehr]

unique and well done

[.]

This poem reminds me of things going on in my own life at the min, sometimes the ones we thought we could trust and love hurt us the most xx lovely write x ty

[Johnny Joe]

I love that line
"the broken mirror of your youth"

[eeoopig]

I have to thank Dean Kuch (sorry if i didn't spell your name right) for requesting me to read this and you for sharing it with us! Good work, a beautiful, captivating emotional piece - well written and good work! :)

[Siena - Silent Awakenings.]

aw, well thank-you for accepting the read request. Those words really mean a lot :)

[eeoopig]

You are most welcome :) this was really beautiful and for somebody else request others to read it - it must be really good. Well done :D

[~Lizzy♬]

Oh this reminds me of something I read once before, but yours was great! :) You have a given talent.

~lizzy~

[RedInk524]

I like the poem. But, it is not a sonnet... Sonnets are in iambic pentameter and rhyme.

[Siena - Silent Awakenings.]

I did write it a year ago, back then I had just started writing and thought sonnets were poems with 14 lines, haha guess I was wrong... ah well thanks for the review. :')

[RedInk524]

Lol, i made the same mistake too when i was younger. :) just a part of learning.

[Pax]

mysteriously written. ive enjoyed it.