Untouched

Realising the way things have come, and gone... and the enormity of what 'love' really means.

It was a reluctant affair...
that only myself could really relate
as I sat and stood, then lay for a bit.

Your smokey eyes met mine, but my mouth refused the thoughts, that were lost in my head...
and so we just lay, but I could read your mind, over
and over. Gone and there again.

The sky changed, resembling our emotions, colliding as they always did.
The floor lay untouched, as I slowly, but silently slid... down our past.
Thinking and feeling
you suddenly behind me
hugging, tugging, just being there

Is this real?
Is 'love' really real?

It was a reluctant affair...
that sometimes only included myself, my thoughts
as I walked and ran, then rested for a bit.

When I came home, you'd make your presense somewhat significant
to me
Maybe this was it
you knew!
Just how much i was falling away from you.
Or maybe thats how you knew, because my words were untouched
And our lives remain hushed.

Author's Note

Your thoughts? I wrote this for a contest.

Reviews

[Wild Willow Blue]

A contest where it was a winner, I'm sure. Beautifully sad, I feel. Very quiet yet screaming with emotion. I felt like I was the mistress in this story. If this was a movie, it would be black and white. All the best movies are black and white. Just beautiful.

[marytownsend]

Amazing writing! The last two lines are powerful and melancholy at the same time. Lots of emotion here!

[Fading Poetic]

I loved this one. It has an air of detachment to that I was able to easily relate to, having been there before a few times. Loved this one.

[Pax]

wonderful words of a wondering heart.

[olla]

in the second line.. consider adding an I to myself.. I am not sure you want a coma after "thoughts" in the first line of the second verse.. you have some great lines here..

[Lunny]

It is a good piece but I'm just not interested :/

[Chip]

Awesome poem once again! Not all relationships work out and that's unfortunate, but then again we always find someone new. If this was about you I hope you're happy now. :)

Can't see anything wrong with the poem I enjoyed it! I particularly liked the part "because my words were untouched, and our lives remained hushed"

[Deandra Dawn]

Absolutely amazing, I love it! It was beautifully written and flowed perfectly. Very nice job.

[Pencrafter]

Relationships are oft' time only tentative touches, brief give-and-takes. Sometimes when we open the door of our heart, just partly, we then realize there isn't enough chemistry or interest to continue the investment of our time and energies. The door softly closes and we back away. When in doubt, leave it out. That's how your poem strikes me. Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem was amazing. I like the tone of the poem. Like whispers only the night would know. Those quick affairs we had done to be remembered when alone and dreaming about missed faces.
"The sky changed, resembling our emotions, colliding as they always did.
The floor lay untouched, as I slowly, but silently slid... down our past."
No weakness in this outstanding poem.
Coyote

[timmmmmmsardga]

I like it! :) Good job