Untouched

Realising the way things have come, and gone... and the enormity of what 'love' really means.

It was a reluctant affair...
that only myself could really relate
as I sat and stood, then lay for a bit.

Your smokey eyes met mine, but my mouth refused the thoughts, that were lost in my head...
and so we just lay, but I could read your mind, over
and over. Gone and there again.

The sky changed, resembling our emotions, colliding as they always did.
The floor lay untouched, as I slowly, but silently slid... down our past.
Thinking and feeling
you suddenly behind me
hugging, tugging, just being there

Is this real?
Is 'love' really real?

It was a reluctant affair...
that sometimes only included myself, my thoughts
as I walked and ran, then rested for a bit.

When I came home, you'd make your presense somewhat significant
to me
Maybe this was it
you knew!
Just how much i was falling away from you.
Or maybe thats how you knew, because my words were untouched
And our lives remain hushed.

Author's Note

Your thoughts? I wrote this for a contest.

Reviews

[Wild Willow Blue]

A contest where it was a winner, I'm sure. Beautifully sad, I feel. Very quiet yet screaming with emotion. I felt like I was the mistress in this story. If this was a movie, it would be black and white. All the best movies are black and white. Just beautiful.

[kayla]

I love this poem. It has great depth and emotion(:

[Luke Ritta]

great writing!
loved the look of the poem.
really enjoyed this piece of writing.

[lalala]

Truly amazing. yu are a great writer. keep it up

[Tai Ryens]

The thoughts here echo in a morose manner, I love it. You've amazed me with this. Well done.

[Chris]

Our reasons for writing are wide and varied as are our reasons for reading and listening.

picking out the exact moment of change is still not always easy even with hindsight ...but you speak of perceptions and lettings go.

Endings accepted
even as the pairing continues.
Was it really Love?
once...

Did you count the moments apart
then - with bated breath
now - with smiles and sparkling thoughts.

Your thoughts are echoing within in a sad way...

[Monica]

What a great write! It has a nice flow and form.

"Just how much i was falling away from you.
Or maybe thats how you knew, because my words were untouched
And our lives remain hushed."

...I love the strength and emotion in these lines.
Great job and good luck in the contest :)

[r. f. jordan]

"Just how much i was falling away from you.
Or maybe thats how you knew, because my words were untouched"

this is solid work, and is able to aptly describe the silent distance that can accumulate in a relationship. well written.

[Virtuosa X]

Wonderful write.

[Robert The Frank]

I thought it was absolutely beautiful. Written perfectly