Vivid Memories Walk Over My Mind.

A mother and a child with a violent past... as they try to start over by moving house.

And as we are going...

I can see it in your eyes, its hard to take.

You're stricken, cold and in pain.

But can still see through the stains that we've left here, you're strong.

Our windows shutout memories, and our doors pros-phone interruptions.

Our curtains alienate daylight and our milkshakes makers?.. diminish eruptions.

As we go...

I encourage you that what we are doing is right!

"There is no future in us being here, no true meaning, nor delight."

You stand infront of me, cold and rigid. I guess you didn't think it would have come so soon.

"Darling? The day is here, we need to make a move."

The walls have ears and the carpet sneers.

Our once shiny TV, now dumped in the street for everyone to see. 

It was once ours; this house. It once was 'ours'. 

We go...

Walked through the bedroom and down the stairs... then see how the cupboards glare as they ask: 'Why are we bare?'

Pictures that were once on hooks, are slammed into books.

Draws which were once stocked, are bare and now locked.

Gone...

"It was the best we could do."

We'll find somewhere new, where bad memories don't hang around, if anything... they'll find common ground.

Reviews

[Monica]

Well done! I like this...it is a sad walk through of their lives. We know how it was, how the mother is attempting to console and ease the child through the difficulty of leaving, and finally how the mother describes moving toward a better place.
..."they'll find common ground"...I truly believe that everyone, eventually, finds where they belong.

"And as we are going...
I can see it in your eyes, its hard to take.
You're stricken, cold and in pain.
But can still see through the stains that we've left here, you're strong."

...The imagery you created here, the childs eye...very well done! What a perfect way to start such a poem!! Keep writing!!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I love the grading structure to the piece, it snakes and relates everytime, well done, good read.

[lalala]

i love how the poem is set up.

[r. f. jordan]

the structure of this piece highlights the movement. this is craftily written work, raw with reality, emotion, and purpose. across the dirt-stained exit, there dances a ray of hope within this move, that a new start is approaching. thank you for sharing your talent with us on this site.

[Robert The Frank]

Very nice. Showing that you always need to look for a better tomorrow in hard times no matter what the situation.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Absolutely wonderful. You're use of personification is a playful touch to this heart breaking poem. Excellent!

[marytownsend]

Powerful poem with strong imagery! I like the ending, the possible promise of something better! Great writing!

[BMColey]

i like this piece, one min its an upsetting situation because of the move then you make it uplifting by mentioning future happiness elsewhere.

[Chip]

The structure of this poem is fresh and I like that. I like how you personified standard everyday objects. It also has an wary feel to it.

Well done!

[Octob3r Star]

Like a slideshow of sorts, but in written form. Your technique is very difficult to pen to most that I've witnessed. Wonderfully blessed with the creativity and wisdom of an old soul. Cheers