My Mind and Yours

When opposites meet there personality's intertwine, then simply decline.

To me, I find things unwritten, not neat, harshly bitten. 

Like not everybody's on the same page, or even reading the same book. Like languages need to be remade, saved as in the way they look.

To me (And I know just me) things seem strange, I have urges to change them. 

Develop a whole box of photo rolls, to be the one I 'can' control. 

To me, to you, to me, to you...

To you, this world may seem fine, written the way it was: divine.

You go along, you're one of them you know, you sing 'that' song.

You run like the river, and howl like the moon. You seek to find too soon.

To you, life's a beach, an ocean, a single peach.

I understand that; your life as it were.

But it always dawns on me the very same question, and I don't know if I can be sure.

Who out of us is living correctly, are we living naturally or unfairly?

To you, to me, to you, to me...

To me, I need answers, I need to see, you know? I need to be.

I can't go through life with this heart. Its a book. We all have the same one. Just reach out and look. Covered in rules and drowned in emotions.

I go off script often and come back shaking, its tragic to think the way I do, but to you... 

I'd hate to live the way you do.

Reviews

[Tnig]

It seems like you had a particular person in mind when you wrote this. More likely, I'd say you had a particular type of person in mind. As far as the "you" character goes, they appear to be one that is satisfied with the given "truths" of life and has no need for further inquisition or discovery. To put it blunt, it seems as though you are contrasting yourself to someone who is ignorant or would just rather not know than to know. Might i say a religious person? Did you have someone particular in mind when writing this? Possibly an uptight ignorant religious person with whom you are conversationally intimate with?

"I go off script often and come back shaking, its tragic to think the way I do,"
-is this referring to your doubting your lifestyle?

[Pax]

interesting piece with different perspective views.

[Ramya]

Arresting piece! Love the flow and the stand you have taken here. The last stanza is fantastic.

[Kenneth Compton]

Impressive piece darling, I also have often expressed exasperation with my fellow man. How can most people just not question their existence, or who they are, or what reality is? That old cliche of ignorance is bliss seems to be the truth because those that don't try to question, or apply critical thinking, seem to be a lot happier than the rest of us, heh.

[timmmmmmsardga]

That rolled and flowed so EASILY off the tongue. I REALLY liked it. REALLY! (EMPHASIS ON THE REALLY!!)
Good job!

[r. f. jordan]

"To you, life's a beach, an ocean, a single peach.
I understand that; your life as it were.
But it always dawns on me the very same question, and I don't know if I can be sure.
Who out of us is living correctly, are we living naturally or unfairly?"

another adept laying of lyric here. this is the type of poetry that permits the reader to transform into the subject of the speaker, to the point that the poet convinces the reader that the poem actually could be about them. thank you for sharing your talent with us on this site.

[Liderien]

This piece is by far the best I have seen from you. I love the contiplation of those who follow and then the path you choose is not the same. You area thinker. I love this about you. You do not look at face value. You need meaning and purpose. You will go far my friend if you put your mind to continue to write. I truly love this piece.

[Octob3r Star]

Damn. Powerful. Another amazing write. Cheers

[Pencrafter]

Your poem seems to express the differences in people. Each and every person is unique, with their own personalities, desires, viewpoints and goals. Sometimes we may 'go off script' and try something new, perhaps to please someone, only to swing back on keel to our own comfort level. Peace comes from us allowing others to be different. The world would be horrible if everyone were like me.

[Deandra Dawn]

I love this...it flows nicely and it is real and honest. Very nice work.

[Kaya]

This is really incredible... Its so extremely eloquent. I am honestly amazed.