My Mind and Yours

When opposites meet there personality's intertwine, then simply decline.

To me, I find things unwritten, not neat, harshly bitten. 

Like not everybody's on the same page, or even reading the same book. Like languages need to be remade, saved as in the way they look.

To me (And I know just me) things seem strange, I have urges to change them. 

Develop a whole box of photo rolls, to be the one I 'can' control. 

To me, to you, to me, to you...

To you, this world may seem fine, written the way it was: divine.

You go along, you're one of them you know, you sing 'that' song.

You run like the river, and howl like the moon. You seek to find too soon.

To you, life's a beach, an ocean, a single peach.

I understand that; your life as it were.

But it always dawns on me the very same question, and I don't know if I can be sure.

Who out of us is living correctly, are we living naturally or unfairly?

To you, to me, to you, to me...

To me, I need answers, I need to see, you know? I need to be.

I can't go through life with this heart. Its a book. We all have the same one. Just reach out and look. Covered in rules and drowned in emotions.

I go off script often and come back shaking, its tragic to think the way I do, but to you... 

I'd hate to live the way you do.

Reviews

[Tnig]

It seems like you had a particular person in mind when you wrote this. More likely, I'd say you had a particular type of person in mind. As far as the "you" character goes, they appear to be one that is satisfied with the given "truths" of life and has no need for further inquisition or discovery. To put it blunt, it seems as though you are contrasting yourself to someone who is ignorant or would just rather not know than to know. Might i say a religious person? Did you have someone particular in mind when writing this? Possibly an uptight ignorant religious person with whom you are conversationally intimate with?

"I go off script often and come back shaking, its tragic to think the way I do,"
-is this referring to your doubting your lifestyle?

[Jasmine Thousand]

This is a really really amazing poem. The flow, the imagery, is really really amazing. Brilliant poem.

~*Jasmine Thousand~*

[Monica]

"To me, to you, to me, to you..."

I really enjoyed this poem. It's brilliant and so well written!! I love the contrast between the two people...it is this way in reality. Two people meet, interests and personalities combine and sometimes they can mesh but, not always.

"To me, I need answers, I need to see, you know? I need to be.
I can't go through life with this heart. Its a book. We all have the same one. Just reach out and look. Covered in rules and drowned in emotions.
I go off script often and come back shaking, its tragic to think the way I do, but to you...
I'd hate to live the way you do."

...This last stanza is very impressive! I think you put these feelings into words perfectly. In the end...we have to be true to ourselves.
Well done! Keep writing :)

[Coyote Poetry]

All of us see life in a different light.
"Who out of us is living correctly, are we living naturally or unfairly?
To you, to me, to you, to me..."
Few of us live with the same need and purpose. That is a good thing. I like the thoughts create by the excellent poetry.

[Wild Willow Blue]

"We all have the same one. Just reach out and look."
The essence of the entire poem.
Wonderful piece.

[lalala]

another fantastic write :]

[BLACK PRINCE]

I guess everybody's reality is different.
But sometimes two people meet
and become one reality as friends or lovers,
then they start to see life from the same perspective.

[marofi]

i like how the different perspectives makes this original. i never would've thought of that. well done

[olla]

I like the way tou differentiate between people and that you remind the reader that you are speaking of differing opinions..

[marytownsend]

Another great poem!! I love the last two lines and the change of perspective that flows easily through this poem.