A Foggy Intimacy

The engines continued, out and through.

The city's stood still, as the ignitions knew.

That all would be different, if one moment hadn't happened, but then again, does any one moment not ever happen?

 Postponed perhaps... Merely abolished, out ridden and cursed, wrecked and unworthy of somebody's load

 of a terrible road. 

Where the accident waited for that poor, merciful girl. 

She only put her foot down, to realise her mistake.

An overtake much severe as the noise hit her ear. 

Troubled birds gathered near, wishing the rain hadn't interfered.

 As the roads became slippery, dangerous and gone

was the car that she bought, over the bridge and splash went her train of thought, it echoed and warned any hope of interact. 

But the engines continued, 

out and through.

And the city erupted as the ambulances knew.

Reviews

[B-poet]

Very eloquent, poignant, and emphatic. I loved how you've composed this poem so it's overall message relates to the title outright. Great job. :)

[marytownsend]

Very haunting and beautiful, Like a few frozen moments in time!! Beautifully written!

[Kaya]

This is so well written. Poignant, sad and haunting. It was a pleasure to read.

[Cole Hayley]

so diffrent. I love it. Uniqueness is hard to find on here but your pieces have always shown me that. "But the egines continued" so forth.

[Leslie Philibert]

This is a fine poem, visual and well observed,with lots of good lines with an original syntax, I really like the line as the ignitions knew. Good write.

[afra]

very interesting....i love it ...well done

[Elaenor Aisling]

Lyrical with a mystical quality to it. Very nice work.

[joshua deathdealer]

Very intriguing. The story within a story touch is amazing. Well done.

[Kenneth Compton]

Very interesting piece. It has a rhythm that is at once lyrical but also conveys chaos. One quibble: Pros-phoned? Do you perhaps mean postponed? Good work!

[Coyote Poetry]

"Where the accident waited for that poor, merciful girl.
She only put her foot down, to realise her mistake."
A very good story in the poem. Many visions create by strong statements. I like the ending. Left a mystery for the reader. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote