Battlefield of Etheya

Battlefield of Etheya 

Marching not forward but to the left, no crown on her head so they did not recognize her. 

Spread the silver Knights over the Cheteern hills, and the red ones, around the battlefield. 

Followed were Tharry behind her firm steps throughout the corridors of the palace in a black hood, she must hide. 

We heard her rapidly pounding heart in devoted courage, gathering strength from past battles.... breathing not too deep so the pain of the wounds were not awaken, they must be maintained in silence. 

Showing no fear in her eyes, glancing fiercely at the soldiers, like her father taught her. 

The General shouted: the Queen is now on the battlefield, lower your arrows, she needs disguising no more! 

Drums of the east resonating in her ears on each galloping of her horse Treesus. 

Her sword shinning as her armour. 

He finally sees her, but her scent troubles him, totally impregnated in his most deep memories, so he asks his Knights to surround her, she looks at him in absolute shock, in her eyes disappointment of betrayal. 

The general shouts once more: fight for her majesty the Queen, but it is ohhh too late, his sword is sharply stabbed high in her heart, hence the Queen died that day. 

Sorrow fell upon him, as through out the entire kingdom, even the ethereal birds cried in silence and from that moment on they sang no more.

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is a powerful work of art that resonates with the reader long after they have finished reading it. The imagery you use is both vivid and haunting, painting a picture of a fierce and courageous queen who is willing to fight for what she believes in. The way you write about her emotions and her inner strength is particularly moving, and the ending is a tragic twist that adds an extra layer of depth to the poem. The way you describe the aftermath of the queen's death is touching and poignant, and it leaves the reader with a profound sense of sorrow and loss. Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem and was left feeling deeply moved by the emotions it evokes. Keep up the great work!

[Silmara McGarry]

I must say how truly enjoyable is reading your reviews!!! You have a gift for reviewing and your understanding of poetry deserves applauses 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
Certainly much appreciated dear🌃

[The_Ancient_Rock]

A very good short tale.
I enjoyed reading this piece very much.
Very well written.
Well done Silmara, thank you for sharing.
Take good care friend.
🌹

[Silmara McGarry]

I am the one to thank you for reading and such marvelous review! So very kind of you and appreciated dear!

Take good care also dear 🌻

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you, and you are most welcome. 😃

[Neville]

Cor blimey Mistress Silmara of the word, I was not expecting her majesty's demise would come up from neath her tunic .. but rather from the skies .. Such a tragic tale told terribly well .. Kindly Regards to both you and your pen .. Neville

[Silmara McGarry]

Smiling.... Much appreciated dearest poet for reading and your superb review!!!
I hope you have an amazing week ahead 🍀

[Neville]

I bloomin hope so .. and by the way, you are most welcome .. and I hope you do too .. Neville

[Arundass TP]

Brilliant story. Great images, loved this.

[Silmara McGarry]

Hello!
I am certainly glad you enjoyed and very grateful for your wonderful review!
Blessings dear :-)))

[Throwing Romeo]

Over in a glimmering flash...
The length of this is in this
readers reflection....
Brandishing glorious suicide
or fearless abandon for a cause
far greater then one.
Well thought out. Compressed
so tightly it explodes.

[Silmara McGarry]

Many thanks indeed dear for reading and your splendid review 🤍

[Miss Sharon]

What an interesting tale this is. I felt as though I were right there in the middle of the action. Bravo. ~Sharon

[Silmara McGarry]

Truly appreciated darling 🤍Thank you so much!
I hope all is great with you 🌷

[Ken Simm.]

What an epic but subtle tale of woe and glory. The way it is structured. The message you have delivered of love and betrayal. The layered legend feel to it. All of this is a joy to read. I am very impressed this is extraordinary story writing.

[Silmara McGarry]

I am certainly so very grateful that you enjoyed it and for your wonderful review dear 🙏🏻
read moreI am certainly so very grateful that you enjoyed it and for your wonderful review dear 🙏🏻
Thanks a million 🌷

[Sami Khalil]

An awesome tale of suspenful events; reminds me of Cleopatra and her misfortunes.
You weave a great one.

[Silmara McGarry]

Truly appreciated dear!!!
Thank you so much 🌷

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome 😊

[AYVID N]

A beautiful and tragic tale of a brave and beautiful queen who died at the hands of someone she loved. The betrayal was so shocking and so unexpected, even the birds fell silent and sang no more. Your narration of this story is absolutely beautiful as is the setting and imagery. The queen did not emerge victorious in this final and so unfair battle and yet she uplifted her honor and pride and all the trust and faith invested in her. Reading this story, I could not help thinking of all the brave warrior queens of my own land who died fighting such decisive battles. Kudos!

[Silmara McGarry]

What an absolute pleasure to read this review dearest 🤍 Your understanding and feeling of it all was truly great and so
accurate 👏🏻even to remember the war queen's that have died fighting. My most heartfelt thank you for reading and your splendid review dearest fellow Poetess 🌹

Hugs,
Sil

[AYVID N]

You're most welcome, my friend. Hugs.

[emmajoygreen]

Silmara, your tales show such extraordinary glimpses of your imaginative mind and skill, the above is no
exception. You 'ave somehow created a short story into an epic, from the courageous queen to her tragic and previously unexpected death. Light to dark , superbly offered to your readers Sending smiles and many thanks.

[Silmara McGarry]

One hundred times thank you so much my very talented fellow Poetess ⭐Your review means so much to me!
God bless you always 🙏🏻
Hugs and smiles!!!

[emmajoygreen]

Many thanks for your blessings, hugs and smiles.. they will see me through a very busy day and longer! x