Submission

Kill me but don’t leave me,
for I will be dead without you.

Hurt me but forgive me,
for not hurting you back.

You have tangled me in your madness
until I could think no more,
Yet I am drowning into submission
don’t leave me I implore.

You have laughed at my
tears, for so many years,
and tear my heart apart,
still I am always begging
you to forgive me, but
soon you restart.

One day my fear will fade away,
and all that I am going to say,
 is goodbye and depart.

Author's Note

This poem is about someone I meet while she was going through a very rough path in her life. I wrote it and give it to her. A little less then 5 months later, she wrote to me to say that she moved back to her country of origin and that the poem saved her from the bad situation she was. Sometimes one can be so deeply into a situation that becomes blind and forget its own power. But the inner power was always there.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Amazing backstory & amazing message to this friend in your life. It's almost impossible to think of something inspiring to say to a person who is in a bad situation & needs to leave it, but most are not open to being told what they need to do. Your approach is very unexpected & effective becuz you spend most of the words being empathetic, & only gently suggesting how this will end in a good way, at the very end, without being preachy. Just a simple statement of uplifting hope, which is such a good way to approach this kind of situation. I'm impressed! Fondly, Margie

[Silmara McGarry]

You are so very right! She could not see what she was doing to herself until she read it in words.read moreYou are so very right! She could not see what she was doing to herself until she read it in words.
Many thanks indeed Margie for reading and your understanding words! :-)))

[Fran Marie]

good for her/ found her
freedom from a sad
situation..its not okay
to stay in an abusing
relationship being put
down and ridiculed
constantly

nice write

[Silmara McGarry]

Hi Fran :-)
I totally agree with you!
Thank you so much dear for reading and your thoughtful review.
Have a great weekend.
Hugs
Sil
:-)

[Chris Shaw]

How wise your words are here Sil, and what a gift for your friend. Even greater that she took heed and broke free from this toxicity. Wonderfully expressed dear poet.

Chris

[Silmara McGarry]

:-)))Thank you so much dear Chris for your lovely review!!!
Hugsss
Sil

[Franky]

I like this too. Some writes here are so very dark, yours are positive and sweet.

[Silmara McGarry]

I am indeed glad you liked Frankie :-))) Thank so much dear!!!
Stay well
Sil

[Neville]

Wow, what an inspiring and amazing message. Your friend must be very grateful to you Silmara and you should be very proud....Neville

[Silmara McGarry]

I am the one that is grateful for being able to be of service. Thanks indeed for your sweet words ;-)

[Neville]

My pleasure entirely.....N

[SZHZIA]

A well written prom in free verses filled with honest emotions and feelings which reflect in every line of the poem. It is also like a sad story of a girl. I love it. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing. :)

BEst
szhzia

[Silmara McGarry]

It is always sad to see the weakness of some people, but it is never too late for them rise in the strength that is right there inside them.

Thanks indeed, Zia!!! :-)

[SZHZIA]

I appreciate your words. You are welcome. :)

[Robert Haigh]

A sad reality for some. This is no way to live, and have a life resembling normal or happy. No-one should be a slave. I'm glad to hear that your poem helped someone overcome such a bad situation.

[Silmara McGarry]

Hey Robert! Thank you indeed for reading, I completely agree with you. So was I, so very glad.

[Hi]

An engaging first line reiterated throughout; a kind means of showing compassion. Thanks.

[Silmara McGarry]

Thank you very much for reading and your kind review! I appreciated.

All best...
read moreThank you very much for reading and your kind review! I appreciated.

All best...

Sil :-)

[Silmara McGarry]

Sorry Matt, I really don't know where this "read more" come from....lol..some mistake/smartphone.

[TheLostMind]

Your poem reminds me of certain countries where women are treated like slaves. It is astonishing to see what fear can do to a person. It can break them from inside, it can make them believe that there is no hope. Your poem is really well written. I loved the way you describe her mental state. Good job.

[Silmara McGarry]

You are absolutely right! Thank you so much indeed for reading it, and your thoughtful review!
read moreYou are absolutely right! Thank you so much indeed for reading it, and your thoughtful review!
All best..Sil

[TheLostMind]

Ywc :)......

[Silmara McGarry]

Something went wrong with my smartphone, I didn't write this "read more"...ahahaha...But now since is here, let me fix it...lol...Please feel free to come back anytime and read more of my work. (laughs) See you. Sil

[TheLostMind]

That new iOS update must have caused it :P.

[Lorry]

They say the words I love you, but in reality it should be "I love controlling you." Too many people get caught up in so much that they don't even see the imbalance in their relationship, because some people need to control others....hence why we have war, corruption and peoples human rights discarded.
Sometimes some people have to step up and confront them for their own good, to show them how they are being treated. The world is a better place for all those people who speak out and do something to better their own or others situations, rather than the see no evil, hear no evil attitude of the blissfully ignorant. Thought provoking read.

[Silmara McGarry]

Like always, you putted so well. I couldn't agree more. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review it. See you! ;-) Sil

[Lorry]

You're welcome Sil. :)