Loneliness

           When I miss you, my day is like the fog that doesn’t clear;

          The sun shines on my face but I feel nothing but fear;

       There is no light to be followed in the dark;

           You have warned me from the start,

           that you are nowhere to be found,

          When the hurt breaks through your heart.

         My loneliness maybe a room with no exits,

          But my soul will follow you, no matter what.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i think your opening line is strong .. the imaging sparks my imagination and i relate to it. .. that kind of fogginess when i want to wake up but just can't shake the sleep off .. loneliness can be so painful .. life seems to take us there until we learn that we are ok within our own selves .. that being alone and loneliness are not the same .. in my life that lesson learned takes the edge off "loneliness" .. i miss people .. but i'm still ok ;)
E.

[Silmara McGarry]

You are so right!
Is the same with me.
Many thanks indeed dear for your thoughtful review 😊

[emmajoygreen]

Loneliness is trying to sleep when the bed is cold; loneliness is waking from sleep and still being cold. Is not only the temperature of the outer body but the everything within.. Waking and sleeping in either form is a fog in itself, nothing is clear, nothing can be seen ahead. Your words invite thought to wriggle into the light.. to try harder. And, harder still. Such fine and memorable poetry, Silmara.

[Silmara McGarry]

Hello my dearest!
And such fine and wonderful understanding of it and your review that are very much appreciated! Many thanks indeed!
Wishing you a marvelous weekend 🌸
:-))

[emmajoygreen]

I try to understand what the writer has been thinking when writing and then sharing. It's not always easy, but still, to share even a few seconds trying to keep in touch is a friendly gesture if nothing else. Thank you for everything smiley and kind. Hope you too have a super happy weekend. Crossing all here for a glimpse of blue sky. The only thing I can say about rain is that when it stops everywhere is hung with glistening pearls and/or diamonds! Lots of smiles flying your way >>>>

[Silmara McGarry]

Splendid :-)))

[Nix is typing...]

I loved the analogy you had here!!!
"When I miss you, my day is like the fog that doesn’t clear"
I've never heard that one before! That might just be a UK thing, though! :) I liked this read, short but sweet. So head over heels for that person that you miss, I know the feeling, hun. :) Thank you for sharing!!!

Kindly, Nix ❤️️

[Silmara McGarry]

This was one of my first poems :-). Thank you for reading and your sweet words.
Have a great weekend dear!
Hugs,
Sil
:-)

[Nix is typing...]

You're very welcome!!! :) I hope you have a wonderfultastic weekend too!!! :))))

[Chris Shaw]

Beautifully expressed. The loneliness that comes when a significant other is absent. Your posted image, the city of my birth. Left when I was eight. The loneliness in inner city areas is everywhere. I can remember London smog. My soul felt heavy when I read this poem for several reasons.

Chris

[Silmara McGarry]

Many thanks indeed dear Chris for your review. I am sorry it brought up memories that did not feel so great. But gladly it is all in the past now :-)

[Chris Shaw]

Heavy for my grandparents. All four of them Londoners. Still miss them. They were salt of the earth, so kind and generous. So heavy, but also delighting in their memories and remembering their smiles. Never be sorry about what you write and the feelings your lines generate. That is good poetry if it gets through :)

[Silmara McGarry]

Yes dear, ok....I understand :-) Thank you!

[Relic]

This sounds almost religious. Loneliness is one of the worst parts of being alive sometimes but eventually it subsides.

[Silmara McGarry]

Thank you indeed for reading and your review :-)))

[Peter]

this brings loneliness into another realm, its a wonder the heart can still beat and survive being alone, Nice work

[Silmara McGarry]

Thank You, Peter!! ;-)

[barleygirl]

Your sense of loneliness is well-expressed, as it relates to missing another. The tone of your message has a harsh finality to it, like the narrator must learn to accept this, as hard as it is. Fondly, Margie

[Silmara McGarry]

You are really good!!! You got it! Thanks a million darling ;-)

[Richard🖌]

The picture, itself, aches of loneliness … a perfect choice to set the moment, Sil.
Oh, such a poignant sense of longing loneliness pervades my very spirit from the sheer tug of your deeply alluring tug upon my heart … your imagery is so strong it's as though you've enveloped me in it.
Syntax is a wee off in spots, but overall you've done a masterful job of making me feel you.
With a bit of poetic structure, the essence of this piece could easily slip under one's skin.

You've swept me up again … thank you, Dear Lady-Poet🍂 ⁓ Richard

[Silmara McGarry]

I am indeed glad the imaginary got your senses, dear Richard!
I cannot thank you enough for your unblemished review. Sweeping up a wonderful poet like you, is definitely cause for great happiness. THANK YOU! :-))))

[Courtney Hough]

the ending is so hurt breaking and beautiful i love this.

[Silmara McGarry]

I agree with you...even with all the hurts she still loves him...Thank you indeed.

Have a good evening, Courtney!

[SZHZIA]

A very short and a nice poem on loneliness filled with deep emotions and feelings that you have for someone. I love your thoughts and your metaphors that you have used to express the feelings. well written. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

Best
szhzia

[Silmara McGarry]

Hey Szhzia :-)! Yes, I like short poems ;-)
Thank you so much for your kind review.
All best,
Sil

[SZHZIA]

Silmara, It is my pleasure to read and review your works. I love short and thoughtful poems. And you are welcome. :-)