Madam Madam Open The Door Madam How are you Madam? Madam Please Open The Door.. Heavy Rain Outside Please Open The Door Lights Thundering Madam Please Open The Door There is So Much Cold Please Open The Door
Thanks Madam Oh Madam Why are you screaming ? Why are you crying? I am not bad guy Dont Cry My Face is Ugly But I am innocent Dont Worry Madam Why you crying?Help..Help.. Listen Dont cry I am not Dracula I am Just a Innocent Passenger Searching For My Dinner Stop Crying Madam And Sit Down
Goood Madam Thanks For Tea But I dont like Tea Dont Worry Madam Help Me Madam I am Hungry for 5 days I am searching for my food
No Thanks For Potato Chips Madam I dont like vegetables Madam Help Me Finally I got my food but need your help No No I am not asking for Money I just Need Your Help Madam Please Close Windows Lot of cold coming from Open Windows
Thanks Madam Madam I Am Not Dracula
Dont Be Afarid
I am just Innocent D.....
D..... Come Sit Near Me Listen Me Carefully Put Your Fingers On Your Lips See Into My Blue Eyes Dont Afraid of My Dangerous Face Because I am Innocent
Ohh Madam You Are So Beautiful Your Black Eyes Your Brown Hair Your Sweet Lips Cute Face Slim Body
Oh Electricity Gone Dont Worry Madam I Have Flashlight Madam Again See Into My Eyes Put Your Finger On Your Lips Then Listen Me Carefully I dont want any Noise
Soo I want Your Help I am Hungry For 5 Days I searched for My Food Finally I Got it You Want to know About My Food Say Yes
Ohhh You So Exciting Okk Listen Dont Move Your Eyes Put Your Finger Tightly On Your Lips I dont want any Noise
You Are My Food Madam Dont Move Listen Me My Speech Is Not Over Listen Me I have hammer If u make any noise I will hit your head with it I have a knife Come Near Me I want to see your attractive neck Want To Kiss On Your Neck Come Near Me Madam Dont try to Make Noise Ohhh Intelligent Girl
Oh Your Neck is So Sweet You are also so Sweet Madam But Sorry Madam As I earlier Said I am hungry
Sorry Madam Oh You Feeling Pain Yeah You Are Feeling Pain Knife Was Sharp Ohh Blood Neck Full Of Blood Sorry Madam
Dont Move Madam I also Have a Hammer Stop Moving Goood
You Intelligent Oh Its Dinner Time Dont Disturb Me
Ohh That Was Delicious So Sweet Taste Of Your Blood More Sweet Than Your Lips
Thanks For Dinner Ohh You Sleeping May You Not Awake Again Nice To Meet You Madam Oh I forgot to Ask Your Name Very Bad By The Way
My Name is Devil
And I am Innocent
As You Know
Ohh Madam Dont Cry Open Your Eyes Its Just Your NightMare Dont Worry Madam.......
To me this is the perfect mix between poem, spoken word, and play right. The first paragraph reminds me of that song baby it's cold outside. Outstanding job
I don't want to pay attention to the English because poetry isn't always about grammatical correctness. This was raunchy. It was suspenseful. It was scary! It kept me on my toes and I couldn't stop reading until the end. Thank you for this :)
I really liked the detail at the start of the piece. There are a couple errors and I question the structure. But, I am going to assume that this is a poem. The poem contains lots of repetition, which worked perfectly. the repetition helps the man by making him seem innocent and mysteries. I also enjoyed the ending. The ending really tricked me. I thought he would fall in love with her, but she became his next meal.
An interesting form. To be honest, I don't find the way it reads entirely clear. The breaks can be better structured, and there are some minor grammar/spelling errors that need to be corrected. However, the story and the twist are nice.
Woah! This actually goes under one of your "better" works. I should admit that it has been a long time since I read any poem of dramatic monologue by the writer here. And this poem does it very well. Good job.
Also I really liked how it went. The ending left me in awe. I was literally like Kung-fu Panda's Po "WOAH!!"
Though I did muse over it too. Like I would be better satisfied of it being a Dracula than a Devil because the lady seems so generous, sweet indeed and hospitable. So I was like , why such a nice person!?
There are a few grammatical errors but this time it didn't matter much because what mattered the most was your story telling style. The iteration brings a certain tone in the poem, of the growing suspicion and horror. The setting is also well pictured. Rain, thunder, lightning and darkness- just an apt environment to create a murky aura around the reader.
But one question, why did you put it into the category of stage play? It's not a stage play but a dramatic monologue poem. I actually expected the stage play, was surprised I didn't find that but wasn't disappointed at all.
Well done. Keep writing and don't forget to practice your grammar to make it better.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thanks Atiba Madam For Your Useful Review I Am Happy You Liked My This Work And Thanks Agaon For App.. read moreThanks Atiba Madam For Your Useful Review I Am Happy You Liked My This Work And Thanks Agaon For Appreciating.....
7 Years Ago
Ohhh I Also Was Comfuaed What Os This Poem or what?All Things Happen In One Scene With TWO character.. read moreOhhh I Also Was Comfuaed What Os This Poem or what?All Things Happen In One Scene With TWO character And Some Story So I Add this into Stage Play I am litle confused....