What is Life???

What is Life???

First In  a Childhood

Get Up Early In Morning

Go To School Come To Home

Then Go For Tution Then Eatt And Sleep

After Some Years Go To College

Same Routine 

Then Univeristy And Job 

Then After  Education 

Got MArried

Enjoy NEw MArriage  some days

then live up boring routine life

wake  up 

eat breakfast 

go to job 

come back home in evening

Eat  Dinner And Sleep

Same Routine Whole Life 

Grown OId 

Then Die

Boring Life

Is That Life??????????

Reviews

[Nessly]

Hey! I do like the theme this poem is trying so hard to convey. As others have stated, however, your usage of grammar/mechanics throughout this piece ruins its overall theme and/or message. Try being consistent with capitalization and edit for grammar. There are spelling checkers and other grammar software that might help you. I understand English is not your native language and I commend you for attempting such a feat by writing poetry. I feel that grammar is especially important for poets because one needs to know grammar basics in order to use it sparingly and impact readers. You have a choice to edit this piece through the 'Manage Writing' tab. I'd love to see this reach its potential.

Thanks.
V.

[Sikandar Khan]

Thanks For Review

[Nessly]

Welcome. :)

[Chris]

...ONLY if YOU let it be that way...

as a poem - spelling and language issues.
You defined well an existence most will face (behind their eyes) at some age in their life. A future glimpse at "mid-life" crises.

On a personal note - don't let LIFE suck the joy out of yours. Do things, smell the roses, interact often, be aware of those around and near you. Help when you can and as you can. Don't wait on life - be part of it.

[Sikandar Khan]

yeeaaah i also waant to llive by my stye fulll of adventure

[Chris]

Adventure is what YOU make of it - afterwards.

[Sikandar Khan]

yes.........

[Dr. YumnaKay]

The thing is here on this site if you are posting something don't expect anyone to be all going 'oh this is so nice' type.. If you want an honest review you should accept what people here are saying..this is a place to learn so that if you think about making a career out of publishing your writing you will have a clear idea.. All this talk about english not being your first language..it isn't mine too.. But if anyone critisizes my work I lend an ear to it.. You should do the same.. I understand its your first attempt and that you will grow in time but its the critics that would help you...
Otherwise I like the theme here.. ☺

[Sikandar Khan]

Thanks For Your Review And Apprecating theme

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome..

[Riley Madison]

i like your writings all very much but in this one you are showing that you have allowed an existential crisis to take over. i dont mean to criticize how you think about our world but maybe you should look at it a different way... we are all here on earth as living breathing creatures of a society for a reason. i can only think of one real reason. to help uplift everyone. to reach our goals together and to rejoice in knowing we did something. for me being very afraid of everyone and everything, leaving my house to go to school in the morning is a big thing. appreciate every little moment and every smile you see as you walk along. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Don't worry about your grammar all that much. I understood this poem perfectly, its not like you couldn't understand it, its not like your publishing it.
If it was that bad with the errors that one could not understand it, then id worry more about the grammar. Or it has to be perfect if you where to publish it but otherwise don't worry to much about it.

This piece was quite negative but its just the truth. That is really all life is, and sometimes we wonder what is the point in life?
All we can do is go through the moments of everyday and cherish the good days, pull through the bad.

I guess its the people we love in our lives, the wonderful animals and places we see these are some of the reasons that make life more worth living.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on life.

[Sikandar Khan]

Thanks Madam

[Davidgeo]

Do not listen to these people.... worry about your grammar. If you have any pride in your work you must worry about that stuff. These clowns just don't have the balls to actually help you, they just want to make it appear they are being helpful to make it appear that they are kind and helpful people. It's a vanity thing for people who glad hand that hard. Worry about your grammar, it sucks and ruins whatever message you are trying to convey.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I think its rude of you to call some of us clowns without even knowing us, that's very judgmental of you.
I think people pay way to much attention on grammar and not enough on the wonderful poem.
This poem is understandable its readable, is it not?

Oh and your welcome KHAN

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Exactly sir, that's what I wanted to advice, I completely agree..
There's nothing wrong with the sense of the poem, instead the grammar destroys it's beauty..

[Davidgeo]

If you think basic spelling and grammar is not important in writing then yes, I think you are clownish.

[Nessly]

I'm sorry, but your grammar is wrong in your counter argument here, Cimmy, thus proving its importance. First, "its rude" should be "it's rude" the word "its" shows possession, but you're using it as a contraction of "it is," which needs an apostrophe. An apostrophe used in a contraction represents omission of certain letters. Commas are not used before the word "that," which should be replaced with "which" if you want to keep the comma. You use the wrong form of to, too, or two. You should have used "too much attention" in your second sentence. Your third sentence should be two different sentences or at least have some punctuation after the word "understandable," so it doesn't become a run-on sentence. My point is that no true writer out there disregards grammar. A writer's choice to use or not use grammar is always important in poetry. It is never acceptable to use incorrect grammar in writing without a point or purpose.

I don't usually write on other peoples' posts, but I completely disagree with you regarding your views about grammar.

[Sikandar Khan]

Nessly this comment is for me??

[Nessly]

No, it's for Cimmy.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Well you are allowed to disagree with me. But you have no right to say im not a real writer. My writing is the only thing i actually have confidence in. I know im good. And a few spelling errors does not mean otherwise.

[Nessly]

I wasn't saying you are not a real writer. It was a generalization about how most professionals view grammar. Grammar is extremely important in professional settings. Bad writing mechanics reflects poorly on companies and writers within those companies. I maintain my point that grammar is important when writing in English. Part of writing well in English is understanding how and when grammar is necessary. It helps writers improve their skills and express their thoughts better. Most writers seek constructive criticism in order to make such improvements. Hemingway once said, "A serious writer is not to be confounded with a solemn writer. A serious writer may be a hawk or a buzzard or even a popinjay, but a solemn writer is always a bloody owl." I think it's important that all writers continuously strive to enhance their skills.

[Davidgeo]

Writing is not about being "good". What the fug does that even mean, "i know I'm good..."? All I'm saying is that if you have pride in your anything you will try and do that thing right. Promoting sloppy mechanics is easy but ultimately more harmful than the minimal positive reinforcement it instills. Shallow compliments don't last but truthful commentary usually does. You should raise your standards across the board.

[Nessly]

I apologize, again. Many folks may agree that content is important, but content might be misinterpreted with incorrect spelling and grammar. Most people make grammatical errors. It's important to learn from those mistakes. For example, I used wrong subject-verb agreement on the third line of my previous comment. The verb is singular and it should be plural because the subject is plural. Furthermore, I wasn't attacking you or your writing. I simply disagree about your view(s) on grammar. While grammar is more flexible in poetry, its use is no less important than in other writing genres.

[Davidgeo]

Did you proof read this at all?

I can understand that English isn't your first language so some things may sound a little off but I can't understand why you wouldn't proof read any of this at all. The spelling and the punctuation especially. There's even a friggin spellcheck function in the space where you submit these things!! You are a very, very lazy writer.

[Sikandar Khan]

I Am not professional Writer

[Sikandar Khan]

But Your Review is So Nice And Useful

[Davidgeo]

Try harder. Edit this entire thing. It's fixable, you don't have to leave it like this.

[Davidgeo]

[Red Rose]

Good sense of humor.. True story.
Maybe you could add some punctuations, correct the capitalizations, grammar etc..
You are getting there though. So good try!

[Sikandar Khan]

thanks for ur sweet review

[Tazeen Ahmed]

The flow goes well
This poem has crisply define life, but that's not true for all and sundry..
you really need to correct some grammatical errors
Kindly edit and add more metaphors, imagery to enter it's quality

Good work!!

[Sikandar Khan]

its my first peom which i made by my thoughts and i think i dont need to follow gramer rule because i am not in examination hall

[Sikandar Khan]

thanks for ur review

[Tazeen Ahmed]

It's not about examination hall dude, you need to understand grammar in order to pursue your future in literature

It's kinda rude answering that way...

[Sikandar Khan]

sorry if u feel my answer rude

[Tazeen Ahmed]

It's ok, just try to appreciate other's reviews
I'm sorry I hv been rude too

[Sikandar Khan]

Mein Bus Yeh Keh rha hu mein asay he likh sakta hu mein agr granmer rule follow kru ya metaphor to uska mujhay zyada knowledge nehe ha jo dinag mein aata likh deta hu wasay h knsa yeh poem kahe check ya publish honi ha idher users nay he read krni ha jo bat poem mein explain krni thi wo krdi nedt time try krungaa magar mushkil ha Sorry agr apko bura laga ho to

[Parvathy Nandan]

nice one, crisp clear and so damn true :)

[Sikandar Khan]

thanks i dont waant this boring life

[Parvathy Nandan]

tooo bad dat its nt ur choice