Tell Me

Tell me this isn’t over,

That what you’re saying

Is just a lie.

 

Take me back

Into your arms,

And dry my tears.

 

Just tell me,

Tell me

That this is all

Just a lie. 

Reviews

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very nice write! One not wanting to loose a love. Well written

[Dalebear]

Simple and meaningful poem, good write

[thundergod]

hope it is lie......simple words to express ur strong feelings

[Needy]

I Loved this. Meaningful :D

[Martina]

I could relate to this rather easy,
the poem is well written,
clearly shown the emotions.
good poem :)

[The Perfectionist]

Normally I object to poems of this relative length, as it is difficult to express a whole idea in so few words, but I would not want yours to be any longer than it is. Indeed to do so would distort the blunt power that the brief sentences and stanzas convey.

If I had to complain about it (and I strive to find something), I would say that, for me, anyway, I'm not sure if it pushes the right tone. The way it is written feels forceful, almost angry, but the words themselves are more of desperation. If you were going for a blend of the two, congratulations, but otherwise I confess myself a little lost.

Excellent work regardless.

[Coyote Poetry]

The heart don't want to let go. A beautiful and sad poem.
Coyote