Jealousy

A hateful pain gnawing at my heart.

A hot surge in my veins.

It forms tears in my eyes, making me blind.

It makes your words twist around,

fueling the anger growing inside me.

It makes me yell and run away.

It takes all I have

to say "it's okay".

The rage is taking over

every inch of my being.

The thoughts are racing around my mind,

painting pictures of lies and betrayal-

Right before my eyes.

It forms my fists, ready to strike.

It infects my words with It's venom,

making you hate me more.

Because I can't ever be good enough,

at least that's what It says.

But by the time I realize

that none of It is true,

this jealousy

has made me lose you...

Reviews

[Gwen Violet]

I like this. It's a super accurate portrayal of a feeling that most everyone has experienced. You use words that induce vivid imagery and put the reader in that state of mind. I felt jealousy myself, as I read this. The "gnawing," the "surge," the "fists"... just for example.

[Sierra Erway]

I am so happy it had an actual effect on you as you read! I mean, I know it isn't a good feeling, but knowing it was that vivid in your mind makes me feel it was a success. Thank you very much!