Picture WIndow

Picture WIndow

A Poem by Sidewalk

 There was no reason
for such a dose
so they raised their glasses
to an empty toast

Taking comfort in its lonely warmth.

Their hollow laughter 
filled the crowded hall
and lifeless shadows 
danced upon the walls

The bartender announced last call.

From a Picture Window 
we both observed
as bodies swayed 
and taillights swerved

our breath formed a blinding fog.

Glasses smashed
and friends were missed
Mistaken words 
turned into fists

and misplaced lovers found lips to kiss

Though buttoned tight
our hearts may stray
but Hand-in-Hand
we walked away

Into the cool summer night.

© 2009 Sidewalk


Author's Note

Sidewalk
yeah, wrote it while listening to "Grapevine Fires" by DCFC, maybe that'll help

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This was a really good poem... For some reason I pictured each scene as a pop up book page, looking through a window and raising glasses. I've never heard the song, but I'm sure once I do I'll see where this awesomeness came from! One of my favorite stanzas:

"Glasses smashed
and friends were missed
Mistaken words
turned into fists

and misplaced lovers found lips to kiss"

It all flowed so fantastically. I've decided to favorite this...it's something I need to read more than once! Kudos :]

Posted 15 Years Ago


let's see more of your words, it's a worthy style. . . get to it!

and welcome to the Writer's Cafe

Posted 15 Years Ago


an intriguing style. painting us a picture of a random drunken night at the bar. love the imagery here & i like the format you've used. the rhythm of this poem is amazing. great write.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I've been cruising the newbies forum and haven't found much worth reviewing. However, this piece is a worthy writ. Cheers.

I see that you haven't written anything in three years. Stop it. Write. Writers write. Poets poet. So get to writing and poeting.

Eric

Posted 15 Years Ago


thanks, I appreciate the support. I haven't written anything for 3 years and thought maybe I'd lost it.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I love this. This is like most Friday nights at my in-laws ;)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was nice, the flow was simply flawless!
Would love to read more of you.

Posted 15 Years Ago


very good! i hope you fill your page up, im liking this poem!

Posted 15 Years Ago


I like this, i know who you speak of
This has flow and rhythm to it
Like this well written

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on July 9, 2009
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