Once

Once

you grabbed me

in your arms

a great surprise

to me

kissed me deeply

within the realms

of the Poe Museum

that beautiful, fateful

day.

 

Once

you read

Italian songs

to me-

in translation

from the stereo's

lovely muse

as I alone

did swoon

at both the music

set forth

and your own

tongue's tune.

 

Once

we traveled together

to a very magical

place

where I saw a fairy

dance

amidst the petunia's

embrace.

 

Always

I long

to experience

each of these marvels

again-

simply because

each one of them

were experienced

with you-

as every one of them

touched me so

straight to my very

soul.

 

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I never like to hear things like "did swoon" in prose or rhyme. It can't be prose because nobody says, "did swoon" and if it goes into a rhyme it still sounds phony. That is my only objection to an otherwise delightful piece. The mention of the "Poe museum" and the "Italian songs" give the piece a continental air which is charming. I still would prefer "I swooned alone" to "I did swoon". But it's just my opinion; a personal irk of mine I guess one could say. It's like someone saying "I did go" instead of "I went". To me, that just doesn't sound right.

[Bear]

The times we long to visit once more~~ ;~) This is an eloquent write!! Love it!!

[Tate Morgan]

Im afraid ole Franklin wouldn't recognize a poetic heart if it slapped him aside the head .I loved it it sang a tune of innocent days to me.
your friend Tate

[BjH]

it was the title that drew me
but so much so nice words have already been said
and in ways better than i could
but i liked this
alot
yours
benjamin

[Stacey Watts]

This was a very beautiful piece. Very soul stirring. I like the romantic flow.

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

you are lovely! you speack with a silk pen....excellent write..this i love so much..the flow is great! x0x0x

[Drachke Thoth]

You have a very Eloquent writing tongue that caresses true love holdings with its sweet sweet kisses.
Is good, uplifting.

-Drachke

[An owl on the moon]

This is so profoundly beautiful, tender, lifting... Your words softly express the depth of love and life shared by two that are so meant to be together. Wonderful words!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

as I alone
did swoon
at both the music
set forth
and your own
tongue's tune.

Wow those lines alone take my breathe away... again your words just radiate love and passion in your unique and eloquent style. Absolutely an extraordinary piece of writing.