A Day's Passing

We were

all that could be

the nebulae

embraced

by the full moon

at night-

the Light

induced by the Sun

at day-

then you went away.

 

My heart sang

a song of reverence,

of solitude,

of loss

for that which had

become common

our embrace,

our kisses,

our passion

yet apart

I can not say that

I do not long for you

more than when you are

with me

as the lonesomeness

sets in

as quickly as a day's

passing.

 

Reviews

[theludus]

Yes, this is very lovely and the words chosen with care. You worked very well within this theme and such a short space to make this a very rich and bittersweet offering. Maybe 'were together' rather than are together, since he is left.

nice work.

[Emily B]

oh, wow, I felt the height of it. Taller than the smiling moon, I think.

[The Viking]

Beautifully passionate. This captures the same existentialism lovers can feel beneath a summer moon and stars - them being part of that great nebula. Too bad day had to come. Curse the sunlight.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love connected by the power of the universe... very beautifully penned... such longing and eternal love drips from this wonderful piece.

[deeps]

This is a most loving sincere piece. Very beautiful write here.

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

this is most lovely as you are my dear! x0x0x0x0x excellent words, a touch of magic in your heart and fingers....x0x0x0x0x0x

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I like the idea...the cosmic love thing. I think it would be more astonomically correct though to have the nebulae embracing the full moon instead of vice versa. Nebulae are groups of stars, planets orbit stars and moons orbit planets, so technically...lol It was beautiful, never mind me.