First Glance

At first

when I saw you near

you passed

by my door

the brief rear of you

is all I saw-

clad in black leather

jacket

briefcase in tow

my breath left

for a moment

as it seemed to me

I'd known you for infinity-

 

a quick rear glance

was all it took

I did not even partake

in your look

your eyes I did not see

from there

but love was immediately

in the air.

 

I can not say what

it was that took me

aback

a kindred spirit

I know you were

although now

you have gone afar.

 

Those few moments

after

we shared in passing

are forever remembered

by me as a

glimpse of love

times trinity.

 

Though there was

nothing I could do to

make you mine

it truly was sublime-

to see you smile

that proved to be enough

as you were taken

by another wild rose.

 

So, I sit occasionally

and ponder

those moments of joy

when you finally turned

and smiled my way.

 

A warm touch to my

heart

it was indeed

and enough it will

have to be.

 

 

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Awww -- very touching! And in the grand tradition of so many recorded unconsummated brief encounters, the hauntingly luminous face in a train window, the unexpected FEELING of a random presence in passing, the enigmatic smile on the street, so frequently filled unresponsive blank visages, especially in big urban zones full of strangers.

I'm sure you've read, as have I, of some writer noting a face, form, presence in proximity for only a moment, yet remaining emblazoned in memory for the rest of his or her life, bafflingly.

Maybe because we are made of stardust, our aggregate mysteries brush together in ways we will never understand.

Of course, your observation seems a little closer to home, since you knew this one was taken, assuming it's autobiographical.

It is nonetheless poignant to feel so moved over something, someone, so transitory, so ineffable.

[JRB]

this was a nice write, thank you,
Jan/uisiom

[Emily B]

Oh, such a long slow breath of romance. I know I wasn't there and it didn't have a thing to do with me at all. But I forgot to breathe for a moment, too . . .

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

that was beautiful, awsome flow and a deep inner meaning which is not apparent at first. well done it is always a pleasure to read your works of pure heart filled art!

Bravo!

[Kiddx]

so very heartwarming and beautiful

Though there was
nothing I could do to
make you mine
it truly was sublime-
to see you smile
that proved to be enough
as you were taken
by another wild rose.

I love this stanza right here, you have talent, i like your style.