Light Becomes You

Light Becomes You

with the flickering

in your eyes

I see no demise

of that which

brings us together

our gaze met

once again

in the

 

Brightness of

our beings

I see

hope,

peace,

tranquility

in the gentle

knowing

passed

from you to me-

 

Light Becomes You.

 

 

Reviews

[Rory CJ Frankson]

in your eyes: the light the heat, in your eyes.
A thousand Churches...
in your eyes.

Very much intimidated really by the amount your words are so followed Sid-Beth who Pierce me so! The lance o light so persuasive in the oriented direction... Home.

An old poem to read its date and so tender still, to your heart. The shape so lovely, I stare before attempting the actual meaning. Only its title and the shape that remind? Ahhh, a form of you, there in an up turn in phrase I dare not read and denies this pleasure that approach... my anticipation. Then...
the tension,
comes

Light Becomes You

yes, yes. I see. Again comes that flicker. That flame.

Brightness of
our being

reflected so close, the shape, the form. That exquisite taste

in the gentle

knowing
passed

no in passing...

our gaze met

our beings

I see
hope,
peace,
tranquility

with the flickering

I see no demise
brings us together

our beings passed

The fullness of that wondrous form felt priorly

in the
knowing

Light Becomes You. In the form the form, the same beauty. In your eyes.

[Seshat Nidaba]

Your verses are very gentle and noble and somehow common-place, at least, acesssible, easy entry to the luminous sphere of devotion.

[Tommy]

Wow, you captured the essence of the sparkle of love caught in the glimmer of a lovers eye so well in this...It would seem the becoming reflection would be lost without the sight of a guiding light...

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Just plain pretty.

[Moflo]

I like the short verses and choppy structure, helps the reader to focus on each word, all of which is chosen very nicely. good write!

[Siddhartha]

This particular piece brims with kindness and peace - as much on the outside as much as it is intrinsic. Though primarily about love it is the inherent earnestness that gives it the light that shines through.

[emmajoy]

Smooth and loving, calm and beautiful .. you write with such warmth and sincerity!

[Ladysue]

This is so brilliantly written...such beauty within your words...this is going into my favorites...lovely...

[OT]

ah the flowing of light - or energy maybe - passing on - I like how you often infuse a little rhyme here and there in your works - "in your eyes I see no demise" - it gives it a little boost in the flow - you do it tactically too so it just works so well! I love the name too!! nice!

[Robin]

a lovely glow from within these lines ~

[Adelia Alighieri]

Oh this is brilliant, so 'bright' and lit. Very well written.