Could It Be

Could it be you are the One

that I have been waiting on

 

A mind like a steel trap

Quips and snips

that make me laugh

 

A lover true with

decadence

that makes me feel

in tune to the

primordial ooze

that birthed us here

 

With you I have no fear

only elation, concentration

 

Submitting to each other

back and forth

is this Love

what's it worth

the joining of two souls

in unison

the making of a bond

the kinship is so real

I feel

closer to you

than any other I have known

 

Could it be you are the One

that I have been waiting on?

 

Reviews

[Trée]

'In tune to the primordial ooze"

Now that is a phrase that makes me smile, a phrase that creates a lasting image as unique as a fingerprint, a phrase that utterly delights and lifts the spirit as only an artisan skilled can execute and render with effortless grace. Oh, and any poem that has the word 'decadence' in it is near and dear to my heart. :-)

"With you I have no fear"

What a wonderful way to express the emotion of one kindred soul to another, hand in hand, eyes as one, heart in tune, and fingers sweaty with anticipation. Excellent job!

[KAREN BROWN]

This is a very wonderful poem, well put of 2 loving connecting hearts and souls. thank you for sharing this with me.

[Helen Woodward]

Absolutely it could! Feelings like this don't come in a cornflakes packet. You have such a true soul and wonderful spirit that shines in your writing. You were glowing when you wrote this...I hope that is still the case? Stunning work...kudos and congrats for a well-written piece of literature.
Helen xx

[Cardinal Robin]

I could quip along and rip a song out of tune like a loon to save you
If you could equate your elate to a date well equipped to escape you
serious fun in the sun and melted pastels make of thee perfume to sweat me
I'll read this poem again and again as long as we're friends and you'll let me!


Whew! jolly good fun Love!
Robin

[Adela Muresan]

How sweet.

You're feelings are very well expressed.

A.M.

[darkgurl]

This is a very well written write here, A feeling that lies in the heart, beautifully written.

[Michael]

The "primordial ooze" comment is great. This really a wonderful thought, it has passion but its not dripping with it. It has hope but is not whinny at all. It is direct but still has softness.

Very nice!

[Ken Simm.]

Lovely in subject and beautiful in execution.

[WordMaster]

Extremely well written

The pace of this poem works extremely well and the feeling of what's in your heart comes out very clearly

Well done