We Danced the Color

We danced the color

green today

amidst the grass, the hay

within the cornfields

Oh so tall

with a dear kiss

this spectacle

was sealed.

 

We danced the color

orange today

amidst the crimson leaves

of fall

as the wind kicked up

a mighty gale

you touched me deeply

but with tenderness

as I am often frail.

 

We danced the color

black today

amidst the night sky

below the shining, shooting stars

below the planet Mars

below Orion and his belt

below the Milky Way

you wrapped your arms about me

as I wished to be nowhere

else.

 

We danced the color

white today

amidst the cold snowflakes

that fell about our faces

in kind, warm embraces

making angels on the ground

building towers of men around

wrapped in scarves

with coal eyes, carrot noses

you made love to me there

with your endearing stare

from eye to eye

and it was perfect enough

to satisfy any craving

that did I have

at any moment in time,

we danced.

 

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

wonderful, i can see why you won second place (i won a close 3rd. hee hee) great imagrey, and I love the idea you took with the different colors, and expounded on that. simple, yet very unique at the same time. And at the end when you talk about making love in the snowy atmosphere...oh...that's amazing. well, thanks for taking me on a colorful trip and back.

kena

[Cardinal Robin]

In this adventure around your world so to speak...I still have a chuckle how you're always doin it on the ground...kitchens, beaches....anyway, this is a great way to set up the structure and flow of the ideas...an excellent write for you, combining your arts in this one...quite a few at once...
but in the snow!!! and peeping voyeur snowmen! TWISTED! LOL... Great poem Sid!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was special and beautiful, thank you for sharing this with me. Dancing colors she comes in pirouettes of autumn leaves and rolling globes of hyacinth purple in spring.

[Nicholas Hallows]

Spectacular work!

We danced the color
white today
amidst the cold snowflakes
that fell about our faces... so beautiful!

The images in this piece are awesome. I bet as soon as you came up with the line 'We danced the color' you knew you would have a great poem.

Love it!

[Gandré]

You made colors visible with this. This was a powerful, involving poem, I loved it. My favorite lines were
"making angels on the ground

building towers of men around

wrapped in scarves

with coal eyes, carrot noses" ---------------for so real and piercing.

[A.J. Smith]

Very lovely, Siddartha! A whimsical, romantic dance of your words upon the page...a wonderfully joyful read! Very creative and clever...of course, I've come to expect no less from you. :)

[Raja]

Really we are dancing day in, day out to see things our ways, as you saw and let me see. Fine!

great color therapy.

I like its every bit.

Regards

Raja

[Legion]

Wow. Breathless I am. I never envisioned dancing in colors before. What perfect imagery. Such a delightfully brilliant read. Kudos on such an exquisite piece. Going in my favorites.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

oh gosh.

we danced the color of...

jesus, that is genius. i'm kind of annoyed i didn't get to this first, hahah :) this is just brilliant my dear. i loved it

"you wrapped your arms about me

as I wished to be nowhere

else."

:)

yay. gorgeous. the imagery of the colors mixed with the concept or image of dancing was just ... magic :)