We Danced the Color

We danced the color

green today

amidst the grass, the hay

within the cornfields

Oh so tall

with a dear kiss

this spectacle

was sealed.

 

We danced the color

orange today

amidst the crimson leaves

of fall

as the wind kicked up

a mighty gale

you touched me deeply

but with tenderness

as I am often frail.

 

We danced the color

black today

amidst the night sky

below the shining, shooting stars

below the planet Mars

below Orion and his belt

below the Milky Way

you wrapped your arms about me

as I wished to be nowhere

else.

 

We danced the color

white today

amidst the cold snowflakes

that fell about our faces

in kind, warm embraces

making angels on the ground

building towers of men around

wrapped in scarves

with coal eyes, carrot noses

you made love to me there

with your endearing stare

from eye to eye

and it was perfect enough

to satisfy any craving

that did I have

at any moment in time,

we danced.

 

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

wonderful, i can see why you won second place (i won a close 3rd. hee hee) great imagrey, and I love the idea you took with the different colors, and expounded on that. simple, yet very unique at the same time. And at the end when you talk about making love in the snowy atmosphere...oh...that's amazing. well, thanks for taking me on a colorful trip and back.

kena

[Ladysue]

such lovely and vibrant images, the colors and the emotions dancing so well in this beautiful endearing piece...lovely..

[Denise Rivard]

You brought the seasons alive in color and warmth.You made me want to dance.

[deeps]

This is so wonderful, I liked this alot.
Great write and imagery.

[Daniel]

Great write! Like your other reviews, I liked the way you tied color into the emotions or moods.

Good luck in my contest! =D

[bluessadmood]

its lovely the way you link color to the mood and they you feel like dancing and holding to him now amidst the grass all green,now amidst crimson leaves of fall,then amidst the black of night and under the moon and stars,then amidst the color white in the white snow flakes,what lovely pictures and lovely images you draw here,i loved everything about it,wonderful

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

it weaves the fine strands of the year and takes the reader on a emotional paradise to the love in which you felt. this is an awsome poem and it is always a pleasure to read your work.

"...that did I have
at any moment in time,
we danced..."

this was an extremely well placed set of words

[Solst Rapture]

I wrote such a lengthy review of this writing and it has magically disappeared into the cyber junk yard. I hate it when it happens. It's always such a surprise and loss.

This was an awesome read. It had such a jovial feel to it - fun and excited.

Excellent stuff. Sorry it's a poor review.

[wizthom]

thank u for taking me thu the enchanting realms of danceing in colors..peace wizthom

[Thomas James Martin]

This is pure delight! It's great to read a love poem that really works. I celebrate your wondeful talent for joy and delight.
Tom