Our Story

There was a girl and a boy

who lived very far from one another

their essences traveled from one side of the world

to the other in waves of elation, delight-

waves faster than the speed of sound,

they traveled though ethereal space and time

into one another's embrace

rising to one another as the Phoenix

as their astral bodies melded into a unity

that physical bodies could not equal-

it was a melding of sweet revelation

where no words needed to be spoken

as a million things were said without speaking a word.

 

They felt transcending, pure, unequivocal, absolute happiness

as they never knew before,

so great, so pure was their happiness

that they were dreadfully scared of spoiling it

in any way, lest it would burst

like a bubble, so they knew not whether they

would ever meet in real life yet they held hope

that one day they might gaze into one another's eyes,

see a vision of each other's souls.

 

They looked forward with barely controlled excitement

to gazing deeply into, tasting one another

perceiving a vision of paradise and escstasy there

which in turn would bring them closer to divinity

a sweet paradise on earth-

they couldn't keep their hands from one another

would kiss, lick, gaze deeply into one another's eyes

all day and night long

as their minds' eyes met as One

they spun into the Universe in electric azure blue

while their simultaneous orgasm lasted for eternity,

filling the entire cosmos with its energy,

its bliss creating supernovas, shooting stars

within space and time while

his ejaculata became the nebulae

her seed became the stars.

 

Together these birthed a new galaxy

amidst the cosmos as their cries of ecstasy

reverberated through the space time continuum

forever and ever joining the infinite

wisdom of the planets and galaxies beyond

as their Love became the Universe

the Universe became Them,

their love gave birth to the Universe

the Universe gave birth to Them

and in the Beginning was the End

in the End was the Beginning.

 

Reviews

[Michael X]

Sidartha.. this speaks to every readers soul.. of gods and goddesses divine in their own making-
creation being the catalyst for what affection abounds in stars.. the nebuala skies of eternity
i enjoyed the way your passion sends chills through the body..percieving celestial heights.. with ambition
describing the cosmic throes of ecstacy in painted prose.. revealing what becomes of "stardust"

ethereal romance.. your metaphysical projections wisp auras with magical winds.. the way distances
come together when two souls look at the moon simultaniously.. describing desire unbound..
traveling- reaching- enlightening space and time..to what becomes of revelations.. loved this

[Angel Bird]

Wow! This imagery and scenery is breathtakingly fabulous ...

I wonder if I'll ever see the universe with the same eyes again.

The end will be the beginning ... yes!

I admit I am a little bit dizzy now with the meteoric pace the whole evolution happened here, and I never thought about the beginning of creation as a love story - but I really love this thesis.

Impressive write!

[Crimson1]

I like the imagery, it's almost hallucinatory, sex is truly a spiritual experience and i think this captured that well.

[Arthur Henn]

Siddartha, I can not think of any better comment to write as the other comments superbly speak well of this fine piece you have written. I'm speechless and in awe unable to find the right words of what I would like to say. This is excellent, you put a lot of thought and work into this one. The best I can do is comment with a poem that was inspired. But does not justify what you have written.
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The sand separated with a magnificent force
An energy of life filled with the passions of desire
A desire the universe could not control

Looking up, into the hands that held you
My eyes weep with the glow of happiness

Content, now for what I always dreamed of
Lays beside me
The universe I always looked upon
Are now those of you beautiful eyes

No longer a dream as I feel the depths of your folds
The secret folds of your garden
The fragrance of your womanhood

Amazed with the energy of your
Presence
My mind writes with your pen
The pen of a poetess

Art

[Helen Woodward]

Yes, floating on a cloud somewhere in the cosmos, this is very transcending and beautifully written. Your definition of distance love is truly lovely, you leave your reader floating right up there with you...I loved it.
Thank you,
Helen :-)

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

WOW....what a wonderful potent piece of writing. You've did a great job with you choice of words. I love the feel of the piece. The universe ad cosmos is a wonderful creative place. A very imaginative piece. Brilliant!

[Gary H]

Really enjoyed what you have written here. Some spot on observations that I can relate to although the 'simultaneous orgasm lasting for eternity' would just possibly be a bit much. However I like the way this was dreamlike and floated. There was a lot of Lara's thinking in this and I can see by her featured review that she acknowledges the fact.
You are right though. The whole of creation is based on souls. Brilliant perception.

[Jason]

I love this concept. The dichotomy of a universe and two souls.
Great job.

Jason

[An owl on the moon]

Deeply moving, like a vivid dream that seems to float all around you as you sleep. Loved the depth of your passion as the whole universe melts into One. So very beautiful!!!

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

Ahh! This is truly beautiful! So rich in imagery..fills me with joy=) Lovely write!=)