Blooms

The flowers call out

a sweet, aromatic tune

blooms

forth

amid the gloom

of stormy afternoons

making the scene

brighter

more melodious

than the storm's gaze

should allow

yet they shoot

upwards, outwards

roaring their scents

into the air

longing for the

birds and bees

to spread their

seed

as the buds come

back

ever more powerfully

each year.

 

 

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

"yet they shoot
upwards, outwards
roaring their scents
into the air
longing for the
birds and bees
to spread their
seed
as the buds come
back
ever more powerfully
each year."

Maybe it's just me but this is pretty sensual really, in an organic kind of way. So much to learn from nature, if we just take the time to really observe, and ponder.

I'm picking this flower out of your garden for my library dear poet.
Beautiful.

[Justin Tobey]

I really like the ideas behind this poem. Good job. My only suggestion would be to maybe make the lines a litte longer so each one expresses more of a complete thought. I didn't feel that this poem flowed as much as your poems usually do. Other than that, well done!

[Mercury Mirrors]

Wow I can almost see & smell the flowers. XD I actually started seeing colors behind myeyes. Very very good write. It didn't even have to have long lines. Many kudos!

Lizz

[brita]

Perfect.
So soft and sweet and flowing and calming.
Made me think of when it's just rained and you go outside and everything is so wet and beautiful.
I could practically smell the flowers as I was reading.

[emz]

Pretty.. i like the ease of this poem... flowers are so bright and powerful... you capture their worth perfectly

Emz
xx