Far Away

Toward the within

I have been

as Dead Can Danced

upon my stereo

leading me to forsaken places

forgotten traces

of what you did to me.

 

Although, through the muse

of the tunes

I found comfort in prance

dancing all folly away.

 

Now, comforted, hopeful

I know not nor care

where you are

only hope that you lead

no other down

your path of dismay.

 

Mine is Light once more

the door opened and all

pain fluttered away

as the songs' rapture

captured the disdain

flinging it far, far away.

 

 

Reviews

[J.P.O.et]

Wow this is really, really an emotional and excellent piece
The first lines grab me

'Toward the within
I have been.....
leading me to forsaken places
forgotten traces
of what you did to me.'

This is really sad at first, but then the finding comfort and the lines looking at him with disdain

'I know not nor care
where you are
only hope that you lead
no other down
your path of dismay'

And then at the end, the peace with yourself and the whole thing

Mine is light once more......
captured the disdain
flingingit far away.'

I love this, it's going in my library, great write

J.P.O.et

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

I feel a sense of freedom and triumph as I read your flowing art my friend......This would make an excellent song.......acoustic with a bluesy riff......Maybe a deep haunting sax in the Morphine vein.....I always enjoy your poetry SBP......You have been blessed with a beautiful gift indeed.

Peace,

Bill :-)

[The Poor Man's Poet]

To say this is a happy poem, dosen't say enough.
this poem reads like something you hear near the end
of movie where the bad guy realizes he can't hurt you any more.
And that he's been hurting himself the hole time.
I like this piece. Its a good write.

[Don Stabler]

I'm glad it's flung so far away. mine phones me 2 or 3 times a week, juat to rub it in. is it right to let all your friends in and do it, then laugh in your face? I've got better things to do. I liked your poem

[Jason]

Great write of strength from a scorned relationship. fav line - I know not nor care

where you are

only hope that you lead

no other down

your path of dismay


Great!

~jason