Mon Ami

Fishing lures

may have been

the way

to capture your heart

to mine.

 

But words, I know

are truly what your soul

inside craves near.

 

And yet I speak them no more

to you

as you have gone away

and never were mine to embrace

to begin with anyway.

 

And still I hope and pray

each day

that you may find a way

to reach out to me

if only to say

'At least, we were friends.'

 

A smile, a taunt, a flirt

you were

although you were taken

and in the end, my kind pal

you have left me

forsaken.

 

Yet in the hours and miles

that seperate our beings

I still feel that you were

once and always will

be one partaking

in the same things that I do

the passion for writing

we feel is so sincere

and we are alike

in blood as well.

 

Could you, feel my spell

my smell, it did so well

to bring you to me

and now you've gone

but still I know

you rather well

as will be so forever more

as true love perhaps

is not enough

but is in the sharing.

 

Though our time together

did not last

longer than a year or two

I still feel you

were a kindred soul

and I thank you

for your graces.

 

 

Reviews

[Arthur Henn]

Though our time together
did not last
longer than a year or two
I still feel you
were a kindred soul
and I thank you
for your graces.
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This is why you are such a loving soul
Look at this ending.
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Art

[robin]

to capture your heart to mine,
alike in blood,
is not enough but is in the sharing
soul inside craves near
forsaken and my spell
These are some compelling and curious metaphors, you really may be a natural spellcaster. The narrative is like a siren's song to a sea-man. Oddly lukewarm, like a romantic memory of an experience that wasn't so. The woman knew her paramour better it suggests than vice versa, as though she cared more or at all. It's still gripping and an interesting tale about an almost great thing.

[Angela]

This is very beaautiful work. I like your style. I can see and feel all the emotion and passion that was put into doing this piece. Great job!!

[Y.F.]

Wow, that's amazingly heartfelt and beautiful.
The imagery is just wonderful - the first stanza just hooked me in. :)
Breakups are always hard, even if they're "just" after a year or two.
You've really captured the essence of pain and strong will in this one.
I really enjoyed it - keep it up ;)

[TL Boehm]

beautifully written. Sometimes the connections of like minds are every bit as strong as the connection between lovers. Well done, eloquent poetry.

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

that was beautiful.... i might cry a bit... cherish those memories because sometimes it is all that gets me thru...sending beautiful thoughts fro a glimmer of sunshine!