Once Together

The blank stare upon your face

I can not bear

I would that it were replaced

At least by a passing smile

Once in awhile

Yet this is for naught

as the blackness in your eyes

envelops me

How could it be

that we

were once together?

 

 

Reviews

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

I pray this piece is fiction my lovely friend....For you are quite beautiful in every imaginable way in my eyes.....Artistic, graceful, spiritual, loving.......A special lady indeed..... Thank you for your kindness and your friendship. I cherish our artistic journey together.

Much love,

Bill :-)

[Emily B]

I loved a man once who smiled so radiantly that I knew I could stay with him forever. He forgot to smile and so I find myself where I am today.

Your words echo loneliness is a beautiful, sad way.

[J.P.O.et]

Powerfully short piece
'as the blackness in your eyes
envelops me'
The blank stare that is void of any feelings that once existed
Nice read
J.P.O.et

[Poeticpiers]

Oh this strikes a chord with me Love can and does die sometimes for no reason other than we mature at different rates. But when it does die it leaves such a deep sadness behind

[Tina Kline]

A very powerful and emotional poem. The descriptive words made me feel sad and that is good for the poem. I believe that is the message. And it did make me feel. I liked that. A very very good poem.

Tina

[Forest Green]

Potent thoughts expressed almost whimsically.

Good work, Siddartha. ...the 'passing smile' fit nicely with the darkness in the eyes.

Great!

Daniel