Celtic Ruin

Celtic ruin, yes

my sweet demise, reflection

of my father's eyes.

 

 

Reviews

[boyinblue]

niceeee...

[TadKent]

I thought this was beautiful. Even the word "Celtic" alone brings forth a flood of images alone. :)

[sayandeep kundu]

ohhhh. just loved it...very touchy...indeed..."reflection of my father's eyes" ohh.. how beautiful with purple poignant touch.. marvelous haiku.

[Justin Tobey]

A great haiku! I like how you didn't completely base your phrases on the length of the lines, because the one haiku I have written was limited by that. Also, I like how it actually rhymes in the second and third lines. I've never read a haiku with rhyming (although, I don't read many...) Good job!

[Susan S.]

My feeling is that you wrote 17 syllables then broke them up into 5,7,5. There should be reason why you break the line where you do. If I'm wrong and you do have meaning beyond my ken, then I apologize.

The sentiment is powerful and worded well, but I just don't feel it works as a haiku. Better to change the breaks to more reasonable ones and just call it a short poem.

[Olivera]

This is sooo sensitive observation. I like it a lot.

[Mark Pearce]

Nice play on concepts, Siddartha.

[Jaffa Forbes]

wow - to be frank, I'm a not a big fan of very short poems like this... but this one is very, very good.
jaff

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

This was beautiful -it made me think of my grandfather. well written

[Ken Simm.]

Your Father is a Celt? A sweet short but nontheless complex piece.