The Room

Sandalwood

vanilla

so Sublime

as to ripen

up the mind

in sweet coniptions

of ecstasy

as we flail

about the floor

not able to wait

anymore

too crazed

craved

to bother

taking the stairs

we land

right where we are

in one anothers

arms

sensually embracing

each others

undertakings

sickly sweet

wet

dripping

dropping

into the aroma

that takes me

as you do

when you first

enter,

 

the room.

 

 

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

I noticed a comment below re this poem reading like honey dripping. Indeed!

Again, your seamless concreteness conjures an understated elegant sensuality. Your overall artistic grace translates to sweet naturalism in matters erotic.

Delicious simplicity; lovely honeyed passion. Yum! ;-)

[Amberlight]

. . .I want to go to that room - where the magic happens, so well described. Fave line "too crazed craved

to bother taking the stairs"

[Flow~]

Short lines in erotica always gives it a certain flow that is easier to read and catch. i think you captured the passion between two lovers who can't wait another second to indulge in their carnal pleasures. Nice teasing with word plays, i loved it~

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

very melow and quiet, suductive and inviting.....love the ending...chills and thrills are what your poems give me! Brilliant and Excellent...bravo x0x0x0x

[Arthur Crow]

Again, absolutely dripping with erotic joy down the page... I can really feel the passion here, thank you for provding me with another delicious journey. Yummy!


"Sandalwood

vanilla"

Yes indeed.

[Bear]

Amazing!! the magic you weave with your vocabulary!! You send me off on hope-dreams of finding such passion to share once again.
Sallie Bear

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Oh my! I do feel like a voyeur, reading this! What a great write! Tingles...

[ANNA]

I love this one. The meaning of two people craving one another is power and you have draw me in. I love this part:
Not able to wait
anymore
too crazed
craved
to bother
taking the stairs
we land
right where we are
in one anothers
arms
sensually embracing
each others

That what it feel like and its amazing to be able to share that

Beautiful...your a power writer
So I thx you
and thx you for leaving comments for me

Much lov Anna

[wizthom]

SUCH A EROTIC TANTALIZING WRITE LOVE THE DOUBLE MEANING .AS ONLY A ANGEL COULD DELIVER

TAKE ME TO UR HEAVEN OF KARMA .PEACE WIZTHOM

[Steve Thompson]

Nice read, and very well done in closing the piece. THere is something about some people that take you away, you put that in words, and in feelings...well done