LOST TEARS

Tears are simply the raindrops of the storm within us..

They fell, visible for those caring eyes,
but amusing for the hateful.
Clinging onto that shred of pride,
you turned away trying to rebuild the dam,
with bits of your sanity.

Running the back of your hand,
over that endless stream.
The hurt more emphasized,
with each passing second.

Leaving those judgemental eyes behind,
for the comfort of your solitude.
Finding yourself in front of your mirror-self,
watching the pain swim in those bloodshot eyes.

Sparkling glass hovering in the air,
your fist met your reflection.
Pulling away your bleeding hand,
all you saw was the mangled person,
You were choosing to become.

Author's Note

Your reviews are always welcome..

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is excellent. I love the blending of metaphors, starting with raindrop storms as tears and going on to the fractured mirror and bloody fist as a mangled person. Sometimes when people use multiple metaphors, it can seem confusing or disjointed, but your message flows well from start to finish. Your expressions are original and your descriptions are vividly stated. Good job! The last 3 lines create a very intense word picture.

[Surya]

Sad write, well penned..
Thank you for sharing..

[wordman]

a sad write,reflection pain and self destruction,you penned it well

[SkyVy]

Excelent piece.You are definitely one of my front runner!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Its sad..and its amazing...I'm sure people will like it to read it again and again

[Giulia King]

Amazing poem! It's so sad but still very beautiful. Actually read it a couple of times :) Great job

[Sikandar Khan]

Tears Word Common To Me As You Know .....
You Describes Tear In Beautiful Style And Read Touch Of Feelings......
I enjoyed WHat You Wrote.....
Best Of Luck

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Why do we think that only the people who cry are the ones who really feel emotions? To me, tears are a sign of vulnerability.. You bare yourself infront of people who don't really care about you... But feeling emotions doesn't mean you have to cry your heart out over it.. I hate seeing people cry because I've never known how to console them..
This write-up did really make me think...

[Fahmida Mehreen]

"Sparkling glass hovering in the air,
your fist met your reflection."

Absolutely spell-bounding words.

[APOORVA]

like it...
the way you have expressed is commendable

[Sapientiam]

Some people just love to see others in pain, though, crying is a sign of self-acceptance and strength. We can learn to cope through the pain or allow it to break us beyond repair. I love how there is so much meaning to this poem regarding tears. Well done!