Fishbowl

Fishbowl

A Poem by Shy Joe


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riding this bike
sailing through the fog
following the river of asphalt,
poking out from the blurred
greens, yellows and reds
upon nature's pillars

the air is thick
the colors,
vivid against the grey
the only sounds
mechanical repetition
echoing away

homeostasis controlled
fear is gone
locked in place
where you belong



 

© 2018 Shy Joe


Author's Note

Shy Joe
Of everything I have written, I am most proud of this one. I don't know why. I rode my bike through the fog, on a road thick with trees. The way the colors popped out through the grey fog was astonishing. Just trying the capture the moment. Felt like I was in a fishbowl and at some point, would hit the glass.

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I really like this. The title is completely misleading, but after reading your author's note I understand.... and actually I think it's kind of cool.. it's not what you expect. I am not sure that's a negative thing, in this case.
You did well. I am a fan of this also. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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nothing like Fall...and the colors, and the quiet ride on a bicycle...no motor, no mechanics, no noise pollution, just that blanket of fog and being lost in the painting of fall...

nicely done, Shy Joe...

last line...should be "nature's"

but wow...the road in the picture reminds me of Vermont in the autumn time.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shy Joe

8 Years Ago

Thank you. Grammar and I have never got along. Vermont sounds like a beautiful state.
I loved it! I felt like I was there. I wanna read it over and over!
Nice job :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I've never rode a bike through the fog before...it sounds a bit scary, but with a visual like this, I think I'd go for it.

Your first verse is my favorite - the river of asphalt and natures pillars! Great imagery, Joe!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

such a beautiful picture, Love the imagery in this write as well

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved the imagery in this poem. Your use of metaphor was impressive and effective as well. I think this is a definite 10/10! Great work :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 2, 2016
Last Updated on March 21, 2018
Tags: fishbowl, fog, nature, bike, ride, surreal, life

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