First Murder

I've always tried to smile
Analyzing the small things
Looking for that click
Watching the bugs crawling on the ground
The butterflies in the sky
But what makes me grin

You will call a sin

Watching people fall
Stealing what is not mine
Selfish acts of self preservation
Muggings give me a slight rush
Beating the homeless is so much fun
But now it's time for a new high

Time to kill a guy

I've ran scenarios in my head
The strangling of stray cats
Watching the life slip out of their eyes
It's not enough
Can't stop this hunger
My rope is ready for the finale

That girl is alone in the alley

Coming up from behind
Her back against my chest
The fight in her is so strong
Feet stop flailing
Turning her around to finish the fun
There it is, the life in her eyes

I got my smile as she slowly dies

Author's Note

This is my darkest writing so far. I tried to go to a very bad place for this. This is not a fantasy of mine. I just wanted to see if I could do it.

Reviews

[Ghania]

Wow. It's really one of the very-well-written dark pieces I've ever read. Good Job. Some people have no heart and the more they kill, the more happiness the get from it.
"I got my smile as she slowly dies"
This is amazing! Lol. Sacred me, really. :)
Well-done.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Short of murdering someone, I hope! Man, this is scary!

[Seanna]

I’m speechless honestly. That was so dark and well written it just touches the spot. I wish it never ended.

[grimfukle]

A dark place indeed. In combat you learn quickly not to look at the faces.
I can't imagine someone so soulless that would gleefully look into the eyes.
Provoking and disturbing. Good job.

[ManasaC]

I must say this devilish and unnerving yet there is a slight madness that you portrayed so artistically. This is strangely beautiful. I am in awe. I really liked it. Good job!

[andrew mitchell]

deep in darkness thoughts ride in for the high of the kill on the subject taboo but in thought only

[jacob erin-cilberto]

from the mind of a deviate, who thrives on others' pain....you capture the feeling...it is like reading a poem by Dean Koontz...he is so good at keeping us in first person, even from the minds of the monsters.

j.

[WithinTheHeart]

You succeeded in writing a dark piece...indeed.
This is definitely one of the darkest pieces I have ever read.
The detail, visual...expression. All of it.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

How delicious a telling prose to excite all the senses well done good read