Back home

It feels like I'm losing control

Thoughts driving me insane 

Like I'm a broken fragile doll

That walks in the ice cold rain

I give myself a pep talk

By every step I make

It's a long tired walk

The cold keeps me awake

It's late in the night

And exactly at the midnight hour 

I can see some starlight 

That gives me the power

And I know that it will be alright

When I'm home with you

Cause you will hold me tight

Till the sweet morning dew

Author's Note

I appreciate every comment! :-)

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

there's no place like home
there's no place like home
there's no place like home :)

inspires me to appreciate ... i admire all attempts to rhyme and bring a moment because i lack the discipline to do it ... nice work Panda
E.

[☾Panda☽]

thank you E. :-)

[PoetryPenPal]

Lovely work my friend! I can't wait to read more of your work!

[☾Panda☽]

okay thank you friend;)

[one sky]

Isn't it comforting to be back home...where your heart belongs?
A lovely piece. Great!

[☾Panda☽]

Yes it is ;-) thank you

[one sky]

You're welcome.

[Dhaye]

To be home is to be at peace.
I love the concept of this one. Powerful word choice.
Perfect last verse...it sums it all or can stand alone to tell the gist of the poem. Who won't feel at home with someone dear to you?

Thank you so much for this relevant share. Keep writing.

[☾Panda☽]

Thank you for your thoughts!

[Talkless]

It is a very lovely poem,well penned my friend.

[☾Panda☽]

Thank youuuu

[Sami Khalil]

Home is where the heart lives...Bravo.......................

[☾Panda☽]

Thank you and yes I agree with your thought

[Sami Khalil]

Good. You are welcome...:).................

[☾Panda☽]

Okay :-) ........

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)>...................................

[thenightqueen]

i like this poem, and the reiteration of the word 'cold.' great job!

[☾Panda☽]

Thank you :-)

[LovingJoy]

A lovely poem, very personal in the way it covers a person's thoughts as they walk, and the imagery is pretty, a nice read.

[☾Panda☽]

Thank you so much:)

[Saddam]

Exactly there is nothing like home and no feel like sweet heart.

[☾Panda☽]

thank you :-) I agree with you

[Solilokiss]

Aww that was lovely, and so inspiring! Thank you! Love the optimism in this. Keep it up!

[☾Panda☽]

thank you for this sweet comment (: