Rivers In Your Heart

There is a multitude of rivers
To cross in your heart’s map.

So I have planned out
A route to cross them all.

The evening sky is overhung
By a cloud of blue smoke.

It seems to spread out endlessly,
Yet I know for certain,
It will not reach you.

The purity of nature
Does not stretch out
Far enough for that,
So we must move to close each gap
With the contamination
Of our senses.

I wouldn’t even dare
Think about defying it.

The world has not anything
To offer more beautiful,
Than the longing of
Sight unseen and touch unsoiled.

Your words fall like a silent garment
That does not glance the skin,
Yet leaves bruises deep of love,
bright and glittering across
The night sky.

Never did the stars climb
More steeply than now.
Or the oceans
Drop more deeply.

Each moment has its own will,
Yet we must be careful
To never cheat the moment
Out of the moment.

Reviews

[Ashi written tale & poe..]

Nice one, happy to read your poem.

[John F]

Thank you!

[Ashe]

Wow. This is amazing! I felt it in my heart! You truly have a way with words! My favorite part is when it says "There is a multitude of rivers
To cross in your heart’s map.

So I have planned out
A route to cross them all.

The evening sky is overhung
By a cloud of blue smoke.

It seems to spread out endlessly,
Yet I know for certain,
It will not reach you." Because i'm typically an emotionally unavailable person and people struggle to get to me because I have issues with trust. This poem is just truly amazing and I love it so much. Thank you for writing it. Poems are best when you can relate to them, Thats what I think at least.

-Anonymous Writer

[John F]

Thanks, Ashe! So pleased to know you liked this poem and found something relatable in it

[Ashe]

You're welcome! If you ever want my opinion or advice on something, I am here! I love criticizing other peoples work and even though I am a young writer, I know a lot. I've been writing since I was seven.

[Ashe]

Also, I posted a poem on here earlier today that I wrote last night, and not to long ago one I wrote on the spot! And there is another one that I wrote about a day or so ago. I'd like it if you could read them and let me know what you think, if anything needs fixing, and what your favorite part of each poem is! Thank you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This reminds me of an online romance or one of long distance and the two have never met in person.
But the love just keeps growing until they must map out a way to meet.
That last two lines are potent...can't cheat the moment out of the moment....
I met someone online...and went through this very same kind of relationship.
nicely done.
j.

[John F]

Thanks, Jacob. You always leave such interesting comments!