Ocean Betrayal

A metaphor of emotions

Oh vast sea, one that I have traveled for such a short time

 

My boat tips to the left, 

 

Will you please splash me upside again?

 

Oh vast land, one that everyone has firmly planted their feet on

 

Is there any way you can bring me upon your shore,

 

Your brother has pushed me to the plundering depths.

 

 

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PLEASE

 

HEAR

 

MY

 

drowning cries...

 

From above it was so beautiful.

Beauty has such bewitching powers...

Reviews

[Cora Lennox]

A great metaphor for loosing control, or being taken in by something enticing. The arrangement of the words worked really well, but (sorry if this is really nitpicky) three dots are perfectly sufficient for any ellipsis.
Altogether a good poem that compacts a load of emotion into few words.

[Alicia™]

I agree with Cora! This is a beautiful poem based on a great metaphor. I liked the arrangement of it too.