To Have Some Tears

It was my pride not to call you
For own sake
But it's now only me for whom
All the prayers I make.

Cause you love me that's why
You have made me weak,
Won't you love then
My tears to take?

Hey You! Why You
Always love to play?
When I need tears
You then take that all away!

What's the gift then
For you I can buy?
Please make a way
Please make me cry

Reviews

[Reeti]

it's a nice lyrical poem. The speaker is making a plea in the edge of breaking into tears. But, the numbness felt by him makes him restive and feel the need for tears by the help of his beloved. It's a very down-to-earth aspect in which people must flow out their emotions (moderately though most of the time). That's an important message being given in your poem, i think.

[R J Askew]

I like this focus on the wet stuff. I never cry. I wish I cld. But you know how we British are. We smile at ourselves and our lack of emotions. Of course we want emotions, but simultaeously despise them. Some of us have taken to crying in public, espectially on TV. This seems to be required now. But it looks pretty odd to me, esp when a man cries in public. No. Tears are a private matter. There is far too much deeply shallow emotionalism about now. See, how you make me think! I wonder if you cld make me weep though! You wld have to write something truly extraordinary to do that though. I enjoyed your lovely little poem. *bows*

[MOON]

This poem has lovely flow , short to the point and poignant.

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Very powerful and beautiful. Stupendous job!

[Ami N.]

Nice write. The sadness is well expressed.

[Harmonica winds]

can feel the sadness, nice write!

[Nish...]

Loved the last stanza...

[Walk away slow poet]

So very nicely written, enjoyed reading this

[Seshat Nidaba]

That sounds to me a bit like the sentiment of being in love, with love itself. Am I wrong?

[Ridwan B. Kushal]

Good poem. Takes guts for someone to let out their feelings like this. You could try adding more visual language to this poem. This will make reading it a much better experience and the character's feelings more evident.