Life is not as rosy as it seems ...

Just a reflection of the low points in a person's life ........

Life is not as rosy as it seems, 
Nor is it bright, like the sun beams, 
Difficult choices have to be made, 
The most unwanted things have to be said, 
Tears of Sorrow, pangs of Separation, 
Fear of the Unknown clinging in desperation, 
Sleepless nights, Hollow laughter, 
Not Courage left, just not enough to muster, 
The Beloved must be forgotten, 
One must tread on a path, pale and rotten, 
Numerous hardships we must encounter, 
For long gone are the days of playful saunter, 
Forked are the Curious Crossroads of life, 
Crowded with trees of Sorrow, laden with spite, 
A Choice must be made, the one which is wise, 
If gone wrong, It is too late to realise, 
Squeamish insides screaming for help, 
and a tortured tongue, with a painful yelp, 
Why does this happen? Why does it stay? 
Why does happiness seem so far away? 
The answer to the above, can be just one, 
The One that can never ever be undone: 
' Life is not as rosy as it seems...! ! ' 

Author's Note

Feel free to criticise. .......

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your poem conveys an honest & heartfelt message using many realistic examples of tough things in life (all good).

The title may seem like a fun ending for this poem, but when you dig deeper, it's not a very good explanation, after reading this long list of difficulties. Life clearly does NOT seem rosy (as your poem shows us over & over). That's why I don't see this being a satisfying answer for this message.

For this last line to make sense, it would be better if your poem also included some ways to show that life seems rosy. Your message would need to have a "twist" . . . showing some "rosy" stuff, as well as the "bad" stuff . . . Example: Look at this good thing, that good thing, but beware of this bad thing & that bad thing . . . Life is not as rosy as it seems.

Your rhymes are mostly good & even the ones that are "close" are fine. (I don't agree with people who think every rhyme must be perfect). I think there's an abundance of capitalized words that maybe don't need to be capitalized. I think you might be doing it for emphasis, but it doesn't really work that well. A more common way to emphasize a word is to use italics.

All in all, your poem does convince us of the hardships of life, which you've shown with many good examples. I hope these suggestions help for future writing . . .