I Will Love You

If you don't love someone, it better to say a clear no than keeping them hanging for longer, for the longer you hang, the harder it gets to move on.

I Will Love You

 

“I will love you.”

Long gone are the nights

When I used to get this reply from you

Constant interrogation of rights

Why can’t we be together and yet true?

 

“I Will Love You”

You gave this bare reply

Is all I deserve a not-so-clear boo?

After all these nights of bitter cry

That I did for you.

 

“I Will Love You”

That other guy you date

Sorry I came between you two

He’s a drug addict, yet great!

Still I am a true lover too.

 

“I Will Love You”

I ask you, why don’t you say

A straight and clear no, please do

I want to move on and sway

But you keep me hanging with ado.

 

“I Will Love You”

Yes maybe you will

But you will have lost the boy, who grew

To love, to make your dreams fulfill

And make you life partner too!

 

Stop It!

I don’t want to hear that anymore.

I’m changing my password

Wouldn’t call you and bore

And save my two-and-a-half hours, you heard?

Thank you!

 

Author's Note

Speak how you feel.

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

The heart and mind speaking at the same time, different languages perhaps, the heart wants to deny what the mind sees...knows. That said, this is written so amazing, i love the eloquent honesty, use of rhyme and meter...i love the fact this just goes right through your heart and grabs you, very relateable...great job!

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much for that awesome review. I'm glad you could relate. :)

[ms. barrie]

like most, a little too much :) - you're very welcome

[Rita L. Sev]

There is strength in your last stanza, a decisive action. In matters of the heart, it is so hard to show this strength, but so important if you want to maintain your sense of self. A thoughtful piece, Shivam.

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much Rita. It indeed, as you said, is very hard to take strong decisions, for decisions are taken by brain and in a tug of war between heart and brain, heart wins by a clear line. But, at the end of the day, we have to act sensibly.
Thank you so much for reading, reflecting, reviewing and expressing :-)

[smilempsn]

'“I Will Love You”
I ask you, why don’t you say
A straight and clear no, please do
I want to move on and sway
But you keep me hanging with ado.'


Well many-a-times, its just not possible to move on.... Even if a clear NO is given, coz we have given/taken so much in that relation :)

Last para, just broke my heart...!! Because its easy to say, but when we try to do this.. 'Don't want to hear it.....Won't call...' etc... hmm.. The heart still aches, that why it didn't had a HAPPY ENDING..!!

all in all nicely written ...

[Shivam Murari]

Your review in itself is also quite emotional. I see how you took time to read and reflect and then I see the emotions in the poem coming out through your review. Thanks a million Smile! :)

[smilempsn]

:) well that poem just hit the right points, to write that review :)

[B-poet]

A very candid and heartfelt piece. I liked the picture of the almost broken heart along with the two men competing for the lady in the middle. You shouldn't lead someone on though it's best to honest and straightforward if you have no loving interest in them. Great write. :)

[Shivam Murari]

Very true indeed, sir. One may remain friends with the other even if they do not have love interest in the other. So why keep them hanging! Thanks a lot for stopping by and reviewing :-)

[gabrielle]

no person should be left hanging like that. and no person should allow himself to be a second option for anyone. if you feel that a girl is treating you like that, she doesn't deserve your love and it's probably a time to move one. this is bittersweet write.

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much Gabrielle. :-)

[Peter H]

i can deeply empathize with this one somehow .good write to me my friend cliche on the love theme but that is where most poet's start out :) good write. and i believe this is your first romantic one strange most times love is the thing that led up to poetry in the first place lovely write

[Shivam Murari]

Hi Peter,
Yes, you are right, this is my first attempt in romantic genre. Poem to me actually came as a stress remover early this quarter. So I began writing. I wrote about betrayal, then angst because of crimes, then bullying and then many more. But then, I got this urge to write about romance too. So here comes this.

Thanks a lot for reviewing. :-)

[Peter H]

its good as aspiring poets we must enter this field at least one but i have'nt found that sublime love that leads me into describing the epicness of romance in words yet but from what i read its somehow always surreal :)

[Shivam Murari]

It is indeed :)

[Jack...]

Often it is hard to let go, even when our minds tells us otherwise, our heart hangs on for we are afraid we will fall. Though, once the heart lets go, we find we can fly. Very nice

[Shivam Murari]

Indeed sir! Well, you are the best poet in the romantic genre on the website. So is this poem really having that touch of a romantic poet?

[Jack...]

Yes it is, we all have different styles and different ways of expressing ourselves. Your poem gets its message across and based on the other reviews you have recieved, perfectly. Thank you for the compliment, but I am far from being the best romantic poet, maybe the most prolific, but mediocre at best.

[Shivam Murari]

No, really Jack, you have it. Why don't you get a poetry collection of yours published and then really see for yourself :-)

[Jack...]

Someday perhaps...thanks.

[Shivam Murari]

:)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

This poem conjures up some of dysfunctions of falling in and out of love, or indeed the very thought of feeling in love when one is actually a loner.....thanks, an interesting write.

[Shivam Murari]

Thankyou so much for reading, reviewing and reflecting. :-)

[Pax]

I understand this feelings very well... for some they kept you for selfish reason, just a crying shoulders... I wonder if those people really knew love at all... love is knowing how to let go and who you really love most... i understand the unfair situation but indeed life is never fair... learning to accept the things like this... is a start of moving on... the last words said so... thank you, because you've learned despite everything else... the work is abit abstract in away but i do see the connection clearly on the subject matter... great work!

[Shivam Murari]

You just go me at that. Thank you was because, it was just another life lesson learned.
Thanks a lot, great poet, for reading and giving the encouraging review. :-)

[Pax]

a pleasure to do so... great poet...you have it in you my friend... so i guess we are all great poets at heart!

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much. You are so humble! Great people are always humble! :)

[Dhaye]

If she doesn't answer in each time you ask her if she loves you, then probably she doesn't love you the way you are expecting. Sometimes you love somebody as a friend and it's hard to say NO because you would hurt him. But it's not right to keep him hanging on...waiting for something which could not be possible. So the best way is...tell the truth even if it will hurt him. On the other hand, it would be better for him who can make a start to move on...

Nice one.

[Shivam Murari]

You have expressed my thoughts in your words effectively. Thanks Dhaye, for reading and giving that great and encouraging review :-)

[Dhaye]

You're welcome.

[Shivam Murari]

:)