Sometimes....We Just Live

This is a poem dealing with the constant heartbreak-move-on nature of the present era. The various points of this phase has been depicted in the poem.

I've been thinking for some time 
Sitting here and remembering words that rhyme 
Poem and songs take the stress away 
And if u write them yourself they are drowned in bay. 

People come and people go 
We get up, get sad and cry, oh! 
Then we remember the beautiful times we had 
We think we have lost our clad 
Experiences only teach us and show we are stronger than this 
But we are always stuck thinking "Why only I was chosen for this?" 
Everyone has pain, some have more , some have less. 
We keep wondering, "why the irregularity?"
And then somehow we forgive 
Sometimes...We Just Live. 

Similar things happened to me again and again 
I kept wondering why I put my life in drain 
People came to me, but all they did was betray
Others came and held me and made the thoughts sway 
With time they left too 
Every time I knew, I just knew. 
I get mixed with emotions of rage, betrayal and revenge 
But then I knew I couldn't avenge 
I am not made for this, I am meant to just give 
Sometimes....We Just Live

Author's Note

How is the content. Did it make any effect on you after you finished reading?

Reviews

[Vani Jalagar]

Nature never deceives us; it is always we who deceive ourselves...then there wont be any friend or foe...
so emotional and heart touching.It talks about siting alone watching a bay pouring the sad and pleased memories into it ...few people come and go like a wind....awesome poetry.yea it made an effect indeed.

[Shivam Murari]

Thankyou so much! :)

[Virtuosa X]

Great right. definitely affected me in all ways.
It's so relate-able and moving. As human beings, we are always stuck wondering why we seem to be carrying heavier burdens then others.
Write on.

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much for reading! Keep coming around :)

[Virtuosa X]

No doubt your great talent will call me out!
You're welcome

[Prritiy]

I get mixed with emotions of rage, betrayal and revenge
But then I knew I couldn't avenge
I am not made for this, I am meant to just give
Sometimes....We Just Live

nice feelings, liked it.... the above last lines just echoed my thoughts.

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much for reading and liking :)

[Prritiy]

you are welcome

[Sylvia Chika]

Nice!

[Shivam Murari]

Thanks for dropping by and reading :)

[Shadey Jadey]

Wow!
That. Was. Amazing.
The reader can really sense the writers emotions and thoughts in this piece. Very content indeed :)
Very deep read. Great job :) Xxx

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much!

[Dayran]

In a curious mix between the individual and the world and in return, the world and the individual. Its the way day mixes with night or the night mixes with dawn. It depends on one's perspective and the one position we take that best reflects what we are in that mix.

But to enjoy it as both and relate to each other that way is to miss a great deal more that the world has to offer in terms of life, knowledge and physical natures. It is the Kurma of the conscious mind and heart waiting and observing for the right opportunity to emerge as one part of the whole. Nice write.

[Shivam Murari]

thank u for the review and your views :)

[Riley Bray]

I like this poem but there were a few minor errors I noticed, (though they may have been intentional). First of all, I understand you're trying to add character by using U instead of you, but I think it would look more normal to me if you added it in normally. Then there is the line, "Then we are always struck thinking "why only I was chosen for this?'" I think you meant to say stuck? And then 'why was I the only one chosen for this?' It sounds a bit strange otherwise. (Not to mention this is being rhymed with itself.) "We keep wondering why there an irregularity." Maybe add an is between there and an? Or "we keeping wondering, 'why the irregularity?'" Then the last thing I have to offer advice on is the line, "we get up, get sad, and cry, oh!" I'm not sure its all that out of place, because I understand when you say cry you mean to yell not to start bawling, but its a slight pet peeve of mine to see words along those lines. In the end, like I said, only a few minor mistakes that could very well have been intentional, but overall wonderful poem!

(By the way, if you feel I was too harsh, feel free to stab me repeatedly with a paper clip.)

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you for the wonderful critique. For the "U" thing, I think you know why I used it. I agree with the 'stuck' thing. I wonder how I slipped that even after 3 scrutinies. I also agree about 'why was I the only one chosen for this?' But that would disturb the meter, you know. So we can sometimes play with grammar, you know. I have seen poets do it.
"we keeping wondering, 'why the irregularity?'" Will make this change quickly :)
"we get up, get sad, and cry, oh!" Putting it this way means that we are not always in the same state of mind. We are not always sad, or crying or in rage (get up). Its a mix of all and many more emotions.

Thank you for the help! You are always welcome on all my poems. :)

[Sami Khalil]

"With time they left too
Every time I knew, I just knew.
I get mixed with emotions of rage, betrayal and revenge
But then I knew I couldn't avenge
I am not made for this, I am meant to just give
Sometimes....We Just Live"
Those lines stood out for me in this nice , well written poem...:)

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

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~ i agree... "giving" is an important component of "living"... it takes a lot of effort to not expect anything from anyone... but nothing is impossible... ~ in fact, the best things in life are those that are tough to accomplish...

[Shivam Murari]

My thoughts exactly Serah. Thank you for dropping by! :)

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~ you're very welcome... :)

[Shivam Murari]

:)

[Dhaye]

Yes, it did affect me, motivated me to reflect. It's true, we have that heartbreak then move on phases of our lives. And somehow we just do what we want- either if we continue or we give up. But really we just have to live, so we move on. I like the thought.
I just want to remind you of two things here:
First, the pronoun YOU in the 4th line of 1st stanza was written like a text message (u).
Second, you forgot to put a comma between rage and betrayal in the 7th line of the last stanza.
Other than that, I could say this is really a great piece. Thanks for making me reflect. :)

[Shivam Murari]

Yes I saw that second mistake. I missed comma between rage and betrayal.
But the first mistake 'u' was meant to be that way. It is because it represents the general trend of SMS language. Youth these days have lost the habit of writing. They spend their leisure time on facebook or as a couch potato to move on from depression. So 'u' has been written in order to motivate them to write and get refreshed.

Thanks for the review Dhaye :)

[Dhaye]

Okay, it's alright. You are much welcome.:)

[Shivam Murari]

:)

[Dhaye]

Okay, you're welcome, Shivam. :)