Mistake

Mistake

A Poem by Shivai

Who said God never makes mistakes?
Who said humans are different from others?
Here He pays for His misjudgements,
and grieves for His loss.

He dwelled in His creation,
With a dissatisfied impression.

What more could You want
with a world You could flaunt,
Believe me You shan't
make a mistake irrecoverable, Oh You can't.

Cried the winds and the mountains,
While the waters hit on the quiet shores.

Oh believe me he said,
I shall give them cleverness 
that others has pled
Perfect admirableness.

He watched them kill His flawless world
but he waited until, He burned it all and had them dead.

Oh, couldn't they see me glower?
Had I not given them the brainpower
and watched the others cower
As they destroyed the world i created...

He said, as the earth burnt with pain,
Another star, without any gain.


                                                                                                     

© 2015 Shivai


Author's Note

Shivai
I hope you guys understand my message, my intention was certainly not to demean any God or deity.
Its just imagination and shows the disappointment of God, as He sees what humans have done to the earth.
Do read and review, Shivai.

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I believe the Gods would be disappointed for the actions of man.
"Oh, couldn't they see me glower?
Had I not given them the brainpower
and watched the others cower
As they destroyed the world i created..."
The Native Americans asked the white man after they cut down the forest of Ohio. "Why do you want to destroy all things that are beautiful." Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


Shivai

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the review!
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Nice written shivai. Truly we all think God has disappointed us, but actually we have disappointed him

Posted 9 Years Ago


Shivai

9 Years Ago

Agreed! Thank you.
I often wonder what God thinks of what humans are doing to his creation. Well written Shivai.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Shivai

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much!!!
You have written this really well. God would be really disappointed in us. everything we do today leads to nothing but destruction of what He created. This madness of money and power that we have been sucked into will destroy the very essence of humans.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Shivai

9 Years Ago

Yes! I totally agree Mannat.
Thank you.
Ahh yes free will...
I agree that Humans will devour it all until the very end...
Earth Mother is pleading with us, and all we can do is assign monetary value to finite things.
Quality writing about a painfully true subject.
Thank you

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivai

9 Years Ago

Thank you!!
Reminds me of that Nietzsche quote. Good writing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, this is amazing. You are an amazing writer, cant wait to see more of your writing! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivai

9 Years Ago

Thank you, Tyrean!
This is very good. You have a strong point. I'm very impressed. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivai

9 Years Ago

Thank you!!
No offense taken and you should be able to freely express yourself without any explanation Shiva.
I enjoyed the message and the weight it carries!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivai

9 Years Ago

Gee, Thank you so much!
Shivai* :)
i understood perfectly,and you are wight. but yet i wonder, if he did not know this two thousand years ago
he gave us freedom of choice

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 wordman

9 Years Ago

i feel like as a human that god has overlooked a lot of things,i feel like he has turned his back on.. read more
Shivai

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
 wordman

9 Years Ago

my pleasure

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